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I fell in love with a man
with a cleft chin. A gift
from his greatgrandad
he bragged.
When my eyes argue
it's just "a mini butt"
my tongue answers:
"tight cunt."

undedicated to Raskolniikov  

12 Jun 10

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this is funny
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 — psychofemale

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how bout triple cleft chin?

wattle wattle wattle
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jowls or jewels?
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This is so cute that I can't cunt-ain myself!  :-)
 — starr

hah, shaved or hairy? the chin I mean ... ;)
 — AlchemiA

was it brazillian?
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must be liliana
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must be liliana
^^ why must be?
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can not be the L thing.
not quite illiterate enough

Liiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiillllllllllllllllllllllllllliiiiiiiiiiii iiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
what brings you to PC but for your four squat legs
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veni vidi vomiti
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I thought of a title for your poem..."cunt in you"
you know, like "continue..?"


i dunno sounded good for about a second
 — mr_e

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cute. i have not seen this before so have not commented on it. i will do so now....

i have no cleft in my chin and neither am i tight. i think your poem could have been a little 'tighter' though and perhaps needs a little more work. 11 lines would have been nice, or maybe 12 or 13 as it is undedicated to me.

i do hope this poem is from you, elleven.
 — raskolniikov

haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa omg!
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whoever wrote this,  i still love it.
 — raskolniikov

Hilarious!  I like the UNdedication!  Clever.  :-)
 — starr

rude so rude
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yawn 4 porn
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