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i've woken! i'm still.. here..
wielding my gory gears against all the odd ovals of him
all those murderous long, stained teeth
higher ground gives me no good advantage
against all that crazy laughter, all those dirty jokes
his giant, crooked hands loom! my mind darts like drunken flies
i could sleep less it seems... dream less
i always let myself down with steep hopes
i cast my devotion to my left,
my dedication to my right
and time shoves me forward
all things weigh
on the motion of the clock
when the sun goes down
your slippery hooks deep in me
keep me amused, tickled
tortured above all the circles of you
the watercolor moments
you're there though your not,
smiling (although you're not)
your lovely lower lip retreats
but you're an open
i don't know, i don't understand, i only lean on the ideas

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Nicely done...
 — psychofemale

thank you for the kind words!
 — dvdsxr

emphatic and loud and impressive use of emphasis. i am pressed into this poem, till the quiet bits come and then i am turned and tickled and feel kind of nice. not too gooey. not too "in the house with all the lights on and the faces beaming in the mirrors", its alright. i like the feeling of this, the way in which your certainty gets clouded and at the end "i don't know" is spread palms and i am searching to get a grasp of your hand.
 — DeformedLion

gotta say, deformedlion- thanks man. probably the most interesting comment i've ever received
 — dvdsxr

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