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Love to Hate
psychofemale

I'm pouring out my heart
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Although you love to hate me
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My heart it aches for you
 3
For you to understand me
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I'm sorry I was wrong
 5
I can't put up a fight
 6
I'm sorry that I hurt you
 7
tonight...
 8
 
 
And we go round and round again
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Before we settle down
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As the time slips away
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Our love won't make a sound
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Until we put our pride aside
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Push it back against the wall
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We won't make it through the night
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Until love take over all
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I'm singing from my lungs
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My serenade awaits you
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My voice it sings the blues
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For me to overtake you
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I'm sorry I was wrong
 21
I can't put up a fight
 22
I'm sorry that I hurt you
 23
tonight...
 24
 
 
 
 
And we go round and round again
 25
Before we settle down
 26
As the time slips away
 27
Our love won't make a sound
 28
Until we put our pride aside
 29
Push it back against the wall
 30
We won't make it through the night
 31
Until love take over all
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7 Jul 10

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Up-To-Date guys have got great chances to get an admission. All they are required to do is to order coursewor k online. Isn't it a right resolution? I guess it's!  
 — unknown

dumbass with your broken link
 — psychofemale

I believe men and women are quite lonely in america, kerouac said something like that and the hold steady quoted it in a song, but no matter how lonely, they just can't find each other on a soul level. I know, I've never found anyone. Maybe your poem goes in this direction.
 — UHamilton

kerouac was a homo and couldn't turn into a girl. nobody's lonely, but everyone's almost out of beer. the world of actual poets is so far beyond lonely that what we do is tell the prosaic crowd how to mouth the word 'love', when all they want to do is put something in their mouth.

the spraying of emotion on a page, when the emotion isn't made by the reader out of the authentic-like feelings written as a poem, can't turn words into magic connections inside an aquarium of sound. this one is ok as a private journal entry but it's not a poem.
 — bmikebauer

this is actually a song i wrote on piano, it has a tender vibe to it
 — psychofemale

ok, and once again the music is going to be the tender part. do you know pop music, the song called 'my funny valentine'? it's a slow and tender piece, but when it was first written by rogers and hart they wrote it as a fast and snappy thing, very jerky and ironic and all. and, i think it was someone like cole porter or irving berlin who heard it as slow and suggested they change it. in the industry, it's always going to be the performer who makes a song work. i can read a lyric from berg's 'lulu' and be impressed, but seeing it on stage and in the mood is what makes it worth anything at all.
 — bmikebauer

thats wat i meant...the music is tender
 — psychofemale

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