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Darling, I loved you
ambiguos

On the concrete sidewalks
 1
crowded with love,
 2
the edge of the night stalked me.
 3
 
 
With the heaviness of knowing
 4
I was left behind,
 5
to twist in the wind.
 6
 
 
I was a fool who let the cherished
 7
moments that were you, slip away.
 8
 
 
I remember your soft hair
 9
as I once settled snugly, taking
 10
pleasure in it's soft scent. As you
 11
wore your love like heaven.
 12
 
 
Your delicate ears
 13
that once felt the close breathe
 14
I had to offer, what did you think
 15
I would say at that moment?
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Darling, I love you.
 17
 
 
Your beautiful eyes held mine
 18
we didn't have to speak...
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your pleasurable lips parting,
 20
brushed mine as we shared
 21
breathes.
 22
 
 
The nape of your neck
 23
belonged to me, with tender
 24
touches my lips excited you.
 25
Feeling your heart racing very
 26
close to mine.
 27
 
 
I felt the treasures you offered me,
 28
pressing against my chest.
 29
We belonged together
 30
those warm days and nights.
 31
 
 
I was careless with the moments
 32
we were away from each other,
 33
though you had captured my heart.
 34
One thing I won't forget is losing you
 35

9 Jul 10

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I would end this at L35.
 — mandolyn

bumma. if only we could all be Frost
accosting his own poem.
 — unknown

Your Correct   ;)
 — ambiguos

wow. as i read this my heart ached...this was beautiful and touching. i really could relate
 — psychofemale

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