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you know what they say...
psychofemale

When it rains, it pours,
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and damn it's raining hard.
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Everything falling down with it,
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everything falling out of place.
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The tears,
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the memories,
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the laughter and sadness...
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such a heavy weight to carry on those shoulders...
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adds on about 150 pounds,
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and just when I thought things couldn't get worse,
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I thought wrong.
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The sick are getting sicker,
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and things once new,
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are getting old...
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and so they say it's time for a change,
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but I'm not ready for "change".
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Houses going up for sale,
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and memories going out to sail...
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sailing far away.
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A picture's worth a thousand words,
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but I'd cry a thousand tears,
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to take those pictures again,
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and keep those memories where they
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need to be...
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where they happened,
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where they took place,
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where I was born and raised,
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but they say when you get older,
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you have to be ready for change.
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I wish I could change,
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change back into that seven year old,
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whose only worries were...
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nothing.
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15 Jul 10

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Fine poem, the idea is so clear, and you used a ton of the figures of speech, I liked your pun in Sale and Sail. Your rhythm is short and fast, you used the three dots pause very well too.
Medhat
 — Duke_Medhat

"Figures of speech"=cliche
 — unknown

thanks duke that means a lot

for the monkey's Unkle.....I like figures of speech, why would we teach them to kids at school if they weren't meant to be used?
 — psychofemale

the world cliche is getting pretty cliche if I can say so myself. learn a new word, maybe even use a figure of speech next time
 — psychofemale

Yeah, enjoyed the f.o.s.'s I like using them myself a figure of speech saved is a figure of speech earned. Like the whole breakdown of progression, and the wish to revert and change. Reminds me alot about life in general, good write keep on it.
 — Thenameless

thanks!! :D
 — psychofemale

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