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Because I can’t talk (to you)
crimsonkiss

Where have I gone?
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Deflated and bruised
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again, (silenced, mute)
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You havn’t hit me , yet.
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I have been here before,
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and know it doesn’t last.
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It is a storm, tornado,
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simple show of human
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weather, passing, temporal.
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Do  I take it, or face the
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world alone?
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- I don’t think so,
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It’s only words,
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it’s only words
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it’s only words.
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I ‘ll say it again,
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it’s only words.
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Everything belongs in
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words, they are the wrapping,
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the packaging,  the
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protection for the
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fragile, the vulnerable.
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Words wrap feelings, stroke
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and verify. ‘It’s only words’
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doesn’t work for me.
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Words are where I am,
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so now your hurricane
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of mere language has
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blown me right
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out of sight. Out
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of range.
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I feel the shame , and
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hopelessness of our
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nowness, with no yesterday
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to smooth
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the way, and no
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tomorrow beckoning.
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Our nowness,
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as we circle the same hurts,
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familiar thrusts of never forgottens
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threatening .
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I’m scared.
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19 Jul 10

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this is quite shattering, crimson.  i feel.  take care.  -jen
 — unknown

Only words you say? And yet those words have to power to kill- if you stay you are as bad as me.
Please try to find the strength to live again, if you do then I can do the same. You are worth more than you feel now. Don't be scared, you are not alone!
 — unknown

Thank jen. you're compassion is appreciated.I do need it today.
 — crimsonkiss

Unknown, that is a generous act. I'm still not sure. I think we're all alone.
 — crimsonkiss

this is awesome
 — psychofemale

Cheers psychofemale, love your nomenclature.  Steering in calmer waters now. this might need an edit as it was written in the eye.
 — crimsonkiss

Just checking in- you are ok?
 — unknown

  your choice of words and care taken with presentation shows great depth.
 — manuka

thanks unknown, that is really kind. I feel much stronger now. And thanks manuka. its moments like these that you plummet the depths. there wasn't much care taken at the  time, i need to look at it in the cold light of day, or maybe not. Just let the moment remain as it was. Its in the past now.
 — crimsonkiss

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