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pittsburgh
| so cute | 1 |
put on my anti-physics suit | 2 |
sway like geisha | 3 |
small steps, big boots | 4 |
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spine crumbles some | 5 |
one more loose tooth | 6 |
i got no spit | 7 |
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need coffee and kools | 8 |
thinning skinning down | 9 |
now bone then | 10 |
vessels. guts | 11 |
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think feel filter. jump | 12 |
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into the cavity | 13 |
mop swab sponge | 14 |
out bad water | 15 |
i'm tough yeah | 16 |
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true blue | 17 |
fuck federal handouts | 18 |
nuclear-grade | 19 |
road whore | 20 |
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safe risk | 21 |
they say. safe risk | 22 |
don’t need robots for this | 23 |
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27 Jul 10 |
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well sung in the polemic-rant that 's juiced with the frisson of viscereality on the sharp-edge of a glance ... needs to be said!
— AlchemiA
Yah
— Salamander
straight black, no cream and sugar. ya done good.
;)
— mandolyn
i actually met a jumper on the bus the other day...i thought the time for these guys was past....instead, things are picking up.
thanks, AlchemiA and Salamander and mandolyn, for reading and your words.
— pittsburgh
Cool poem. Way to flex your poetic muscle.
— JKWeb
thanks, jkweb. my poems have stepped up since i've started coming here...good company!
— pittsburgh
pittsburgh, you had me at anti-physics suit
— unknown
awww, thanks, unk!
— pittsburgh
Any chance you'll wear that for me?
— unknown
*grin*
— pittsburgh
I enjoyed this much as I would enjoy a sci-fi flick.
But the reality of the situation is that power plants won’t risk their licensing by allowing overexposure of any employee--even temps. They are under a federal microscope. They achieve their goals through what amounts to dilution: regulated exposure to many, rather than a lot of exposure to a few.
I do wonder if individuals are sometimes able to circumvent the rules that were established for their safety. Even if some are able to accomplish this (by, say, establishing multiple identities), the symptoms you describe would require exposure in the magnitude of hundreds of times the NRC enforced limits. It would be nearly impossible even for a highly creative and motivated glow-boy.
Facts aside, your poem is grittily entertaining.
— A
thank you, A. at the time i used to write for nukes (a long time ago), i knew some folks who did this, and it was less difficult to believe that there were no possibiliities of overexposure. so, um...that's right, it's like sci fi. also, in a lot of jobs like this, i believe there's often a macho element as well as a continual probing for symptoms... your mind, more than anything, can hurt you. but this poem isn't about reality...it's more about where my imagination went after talking with a guy who does this on the bus the other day.
— pittsburgh
UHH hold on, did you just say on the bus the other day?
— unknown
ON THE BUS! ?????? ;)
— unknown
ah shite, pitts you just made me piss myself with laughter thanks so much
— unknown
homer simpson, yes? when his car's in the shop?
— bmikebauer
My fact rant was set of by AlchemiA's comment. I tried not to look at it before I'd had my say, but there it was right below the comment box: needs to be said! And that got me thinking about how beliefs and opinions develop, and, well you know the rest.
I did acknowledge the macho tone--grittily entertaining.
— A
A, you got me wrong, wasn't criticizin' your crit. just talkin' about back in the day.
and yes, on the goddamn bus i met a jumper. poor guy didn't even have a nose *shiteatin'grin*
he had a bag with him i think it wuz.... donuts
— pittsburgh
I didn't sense any hostility, just wanted to be clear.
A
— unknown
interesting indeed
— psychofemale
dig it
— unknown
boompfh...
; )
— fractalcore
the first stanza just blew me away, excellent dynamic writing. i had to wade a little through the rest, but have to agree with the previous crits, a great rant ;)
— jharrison
Is this a chumble piece?
Second to last stanza is straight up rock.
— aurelius
Safe risk doesn't really make much sense. It's (relatively) safe = the risk is small (or low). To me, low risk sounds best.
And I've heard of physics suits and anti-contamination suits (anti-c's) but never of an anti-physics suit. Not saying I've heard everything...
Still like your poem, though.
A
— unknown
cool
— bowiegirl
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