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How Not To Photograph People From Your Car
larrylark

Sat,with that automatic digital snapper,
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no larger than a fag packet,
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nestling among the static fluff stuffed in your pocket.
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You got bored waiting so long……....
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for that correct configuration
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of light and shade come on song.
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The next woman wiggling past in the rain,
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who must be walking a dog,
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which must be black as night,
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or a St.Bernard with a barrel tied,
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and she’ll stoop to do up her shoe
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while the dog squats, does its do do’s………
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so you read the paper.
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.........Looking up you see it straight in front, like déjà vu.
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Too late! A clueless fumble, fingers tangled
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among a jumble of loose change, ancient bus tickets,
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a receipt from Sainsbury’s, but already you know,
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your only as good as all those photo’s in the minds eye,
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and on most days your mind's eye is blind.
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By the time you point the camera
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you can’t find her anywhere,
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and anyhow,  dogs won't do what you want them to do
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do.
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28 Jul 10


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well then......
 — psychofemale

The fabricated sloppiness is hard to overcome. I believe it's a device to portray the messiness of N's car and thoughts, but it took me three readings to come to that. Now, maybe I'm just dense, but a lot of other readers are, too. And how many of those other readers would bother to read this more than once?
 — A

Yes thank you PF I am very well thank you
 — larrylark

I'm sorry this poem brought the shutters down and produced a negative mode. Fortunately or otherwise, i do so enjoy wallowing in fabricated sloppiness which lens itself so well to a snap shot of other peoples endlessly sloppy lives.

Larry automatic lark
 — larrylark

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