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Whales, Goats and Him
psychofemale

lop-sided
 1
tangled in a
 2
typhoon
 3
 
 
I wave to the whale
 4
beside me
 5
 
 
he squirts me in the face
 6
knocks me back
 7
 
 
a football field
 8
 
 
the landscape is pretty here
 9
no room for conversation
 10
or experience
 11
 
 
perfect for the
 12
odd man out
 13
 
 
I'm the crooked woman
 14
doomed with...
 15
the goat
 16
holding the violin
 17
 
 
warning enough
 18
 
 
but I keep on walking
 19
 
 
side-ways
 20
 
 
the way I like it
 21
 
 
it's the only way
 22
I can carry him
 23

16 Aug 10

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Ok, this is wonderful. This is my favorite of yours. 14-17 is great.
 — mandolyn

but just remember not to become the 'others' -- I am seeing that a little in the way you write. don't lose your 'own'
 — mandolyn

Well done! I am especially fond of the last stanza. It's the perfect ending to this poem.
 — whiteheat

thanks guys :D
 — psychofemale

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 — psychofemale

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