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better offer
psychofemale

I flipped a coin
 1
to win you
 2
I should have had
 3
a better offer
 4
maybe
 5
rock
 6
paper
 7
scissors
 8
you the rock
 9
me the scissors
 10
you crush me
 11
you the scissors
 12
me the paper
 13
you cut
 14
at my heart strings
 15
what kind of
 16
offer
 17
is this?
 18
I still need a better one
 19
I'll be your solid rock
 20
if you'll be my paper blanket
 21

24 Aug 10

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I liked this very much all the way through L21.  I think it would be more powerful without the last two lines.  

L3 = "should have" instead of "should of"

Would you consider less spacing, as well?  So that it reads a little faster.  All the space between stanzas isn't needed... make it one long stanza?  
 — JaneyJane

alright I will make some changes thanks :D
 — psychofemale

I like this but I agree the last line isn't needed. I would say less spacing not lose it all together it does work into this but i don't think it needs quie as much especially between L7 and L8 or L17 and L18.  
 — Ilena

better?
 — psychofemale

middle 11-12 transfer needs work.
 — unknown

okay
 — psychofemale

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