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frazzling my own ends
psychofemale

I hold the end
 1
of the stem
 2
 
 
five buds left
 3
on this rose
 4
 
 
he loves me
 5
one
 6
f
 7
a
 8
l
 9
l
 10
s
 11
to the floor
 12
 
 
he loves me not
 13
f
 14
a
 15
l
 16
l
 17
s
 18
among the other
 19
 
 
he loves me
 20
the next hits my shoe
 21
 
 
he loves me not
 22
the bud joins the others
 23
 
 
he loves me
 24
his hand joins mine
 25

24 Aug 10

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Comments:

thanks for the rating?
 — psychofemale

I like the set up of falls but having other in both L14 and L20, there's no better way to say it, really bothers me.
 — Ilena

better?
 — psychofemale

i really like this one, its beautiful  
 — idiotbox

ur luckly...try again, good poem
 — Odin

thanks!
 — psychofemale

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