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what a wonderful world
psychofemale

when the smoke settles
 1
will the world glitter
 2
like it used to?
 3
 
 
or will it show
 4
the darkness
 5
our hearts felt before
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will we fit into a world
 7
tortured by neglect?
 8
 
 
or celebrate
 9
the passing
 10
of a decade
 11
hoping
 12
for brilliance
 13
that came from
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nothing
 15
 
 
such a world
 16
that would be
 17
 
 
a golden globe
 18
never tarnished
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never
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poisoned
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by the rust
 22
from our greedy hands
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such a wonderful world
 24
that would be
 25
 
 
if we could even begin
 26
to imagine what
 27
that would be like
 28

1 Sep 10


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anyone...
 — psychofemale

it starts out nice...but then the ending goes blah (imo)
18-23 is good, i'd keep that. and the opening is good too.
you are definitely progressing with your writing. :)
 — mandolyn

thank you :)
 — psychofemale

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