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Memory Trace
larrylark

Another country looms
 1
beyond glacial mountains
 2
soon to melt down.
 3
 
 
There you are
 4
sitting in the restaurant
 5
you never went to,
 6
ordering a meal
 7
you would not eat
 8
on any month of Sundays,
 9
speaking in tongues,
 10
with a woman you vaguely
 11
think you once longingly saw
 12
on the pelican crossing
 13
outside the Pound Shop,
 14
strolling away from you.
 15
 
 
That clown? Could it be?
 16
Clutching a second hand
 17
jar of Harpic,
 18
bottle of cheap bleach.
 19
 
 
What the hell is that?
 20
Dancing round the garden
 21
in lieder hose,
 22
snot dangling from its nose.
 23
 
 
There is the cradle,
 24
something pink and pukey
 25
was screaming down the house,
 26
finally silence
 27
fell on the nursery room.
 28
 
 
You were never even a memory trace,
 29
staining your shroud,
 30
blurring you face,
 31
taken off your own case.
 32
 
 
 
 
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 33

6 Oct 10


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this is just an excellent poem. Small nit: Line 31, should be "your" face
line 17, secondhand is one word, isn't it?
 — PatriciaSan

i would lose 'even' in L29 and say 'traced'
and i would lose the last line and end it at 31.
11-12 reads awkward to me.

i like 20-28
 — mandolyn

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