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Black On White

Snow covered the churchyard as they laid him
in his final place. Smoke from a compost fire
went straight up, forming charcoal colours.
White flakes turned grey.
Through breaking light I heard someone say,
“He traded with small machinery firms.”
A chapter read from his life, nothing learned,
the remainder a closed book.
Later, at the wake in his suburban house
flames reflected in the black leaded hearth.
Insubstantial shadows crowded
the living room’s matt painted walls.
Outside, sleet dissolved onto wood ash,
Snow formed dark viscous pools.
Soon to be no longer mourners headed home,
loosening ties, removing hats.
Ghosts and ghouls drift,
white shifts to black and back
in a grey world, curling like bonfire smoke
vanished as the last stars faded in a clearing sky.

2 Nov 10

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one can say, "see ya in hell"
 — unknown

To everything there is a season...a time to be born and a time to die.
 — pasnitro

Hey larrylark! You're still around. :)
l15 is my fav
Love the continuing theme of fire throughout. I just lost someone and this really hits home. Nice work.
 — amy


ok i feel like i'm taking crazy pills today.
no really...
anyone else on this boat??

Larry this write is sublime. So many lines complimenting eachother. They are very well discplined as a poem. :)
 — mandolyn

But never heaven as they have run out of room for guys who sin and we all do.

Larry unrepentant Lark
 — larrylark

Hi pasnitro

and in between we are exploited

Larry wor abhat the workers? Lark
 — larrylark

Dear Amy

I am sorry for your loss for death seems so final and there is often so much still to say or do. On a more cheerful note...yes i am still around and my ambition is to fade away just after i have posted my best ever poem on PC.

Larry immortal Lark
 — larrylark

absolutely love the last stanza.
 — jharrison

Cheers jHarrison

Larry happy boy Lark
 — larrylark