poetry critical

online poetry workshop



obviously difficult
KAE12

Its so obviously dificult
 1
To the point where desire is
 2
disengaged from the medium it survives upon.
 3
My pengilium mind
 4
Swiftly deciphering the difference between life and love.
 5
A catalyst for calamity created by the creamation of prior hearts.
 6
 
 
And prior pasts put a pause on future plans with out proper judgement.
 7
 
 
If we're to be judged by our mistakes, mistake me for a saint. Because baby, you're everything you subconsciously portrayed; its so obvious, its difficult.
 8

23 Nov 10

Rated 10 (8) by 1 users.
Active (1):
Inactive (3): 1, 6, 10, 10

(define the words in this poem)
(16 more poems by this author)



Add A Comment:
Enter the following text to post as unknown: captcha

Comments:

purty good. would end on portrayed. if it were mine which of course tis snot. thanks.
 — unknown

Thank you, I appreciate all feedback!
 — KAE12

essay-blog writing for people who don't want to have to follow essay clause-paragraph rules. very healthy, if you don't want to have to really say anything but a complaint and know that that'd just be graded down in comp 1. makes it hard to know what to do with something like this, but then you find p.c.
 — bmikebauer

Bmik- I don't even know what you're saying. Are you saying the internet age has allowed ppl to post random stuff anywhere and anyway they want with no sense of titlement or care? Basically that this sucks? If so, fair enough.

Maybe you can check out some of my older stuff. I would appreciate it. Thanks
 — KAE12

Hi Kae - Sorry, but to me, it reads like a series of stacked and slightly disjointed statements. As for presentation, I would split line 3 after medium then add a blank line. Why did you pick pengilium over pendulum - for the sonics or the novelty? How can an oscillation-noodle decipher anything by definition if it's swingin' this way and that - surely it would swing between life and love? The following lines could also be split and re-worked a little - can you explain the reasoning behind why the super-long line 8 and the redundant repetition at the end? I tried to get into it but I couldn't - apologies... Mitch :-)
 — pdemitchell

no, kae, people have always doodled with words. but, there's no pattern of poetricking in this, and it just unravels before it's even finished as a knit head-warmer. saying stuff is noble -- what you say has to be true, just because it's your truth and you feel it. but, feelings have no content, and with a slight shift you might have been writing about your camry not starting this morning. line six seems to have stopped you cold, like it was too brilliant and finished the thought.

thoughts are mind-flashes and un-connected with reality. reality is actually your writing this poem, not what you thought or felt -- the only way we can know you is through your writing, and if you simply drop brilliant insights, you're ghosting: we can't be sure you're real.
 — bmikebauer

Difficult, line 1

This doesn't read like a poem to me.  You aren't telling the reader anything about what's difficult, what the situation is, only a little action.

Spelling does count.  Cremation, not creamation.  Without, not with out.

Not doing much for me, the lines are too 'important' but seem to say little, not an authentic voice.  
 — Isabelle5

what if the author wanted to say that the hearts were emulsified and burnt at the same time?

spelling is true only to the poem. your dictionary idea of what spelling is is a novel writers way. why are you commenting in a poetry workshop?
 — bmikebauer

So wii kn mangl spling inevry pme bks murke says iiiiiits peeotreery - praaat
 — unknown

in a poem space, spelling is plastic. but, in a comments space, you have an opinion and it has to push buttons people already have on their vest.
 — bmikebauer

fine to me however needs editing & refinement
 — unknown

you spelled difficult wrong in L1
 — unknown

check out CK Williams' collection called "flesh and blood"
 — unknown

I haven't received a comment in a while, just trying to see if anyone has anything to say. I appreciate the feedback!
 — KAE12

aqinga17.12.06puma sneakers
Wedding Rings- Official
Jewelry Armoire - Official
kate spade uk
coach factory outlet online
sunglasses hut
softball jerseys
pandora jewelry sale
kate spade new york store
Nike Air Max 180
michael kors outlet online
seiko watches
snow boots
louis vuitton outlet
Nike Air Max
shop mlb
jimmy choo outlet
kate spade purses
Nike Schuhe Herren
kate spade
Nike Air Max
louis vuitton outlet
birkenstock canada
ray ban uk
ua shoes
coach factory outlet
Black Friday Sales
Wholesale womens autumn winter clothing
michael kors outlet
tiffany co
kate spade outlet online
mk outlet online
ray ban outlet sale
Prada Bags
Louis Vuitton Online
Nike Jordans
under armour
timberland outlet
gucci watches
payless shoes
burberry outlet sale
Jimmy Choo Shoes
Jordan Fusion Femme
ugg uk
jimmy choo outlet
Michael Kors Outlet
jimmy choo
kate spade outlet
tiffany co
kate spade outlet online
Dreamland Jewelry - Official
pandora australia
Nike Air Max Chase
Coach Purses
michael kors outlet
Cartier Watches
shoes sale
Nike Free
ray ban sunglasses outlet
Nike Blazer Femmes
Air Max 90
ray ban sunglasses
Air Max 90 Femme
Ray Ban sunglasses
Wave Prophecy 2 Shoes
michael kors outlet
Nike Air Max 90
Kay Jewelers - Official
michael kors bags
pandora uk
Premier Jewelry - Official
louis vuitton
hot burberry outlet
michael kors
michael kors outlet
hermes bag
Air Max 180
Nike KD 8
coach outlet online sale
puma shoes
kate spade bags
The Retail Compliance Association
Nike Air Max 2017
ray ban outlet
pandora charms uk
michael kors outlet sale
Jared Jewelry - Official
pandora rings uk
chanel outlet
michael kors outlet
under armour shoes
Doxycycline
pandora rings
ray ban outlet
Nike Air Max Femme
timberland boots
kate spade outlet
michael kors outlet online
prada online
Salomon Speedcross Shoes
hermes belt
ray ban wayfarer sunglasses
outlet sale
black friday shopping
Nike Air Jordan Homme
pandora rings
Nike Air Max 2017
nike running shoes
Nike Air Max
kate spade italy
ugg boots
Longchamp outlet
Louis Vuitton Outlet
pandora charms
school bags on sale
north face sale
michael kors
michael kors outlet
Air Jordan Fly 23
michael kors
abercrombie canada
rolex watch
Nike Air Max 90  pas cher france
Nike Schuhe Damen
Michael Kors Outlet
Nike Air Jordan Enfants
louis vuitton bags
prada outlet online
yeezy shoes
pandora bracelets charms
prada handbags
timberland shoes
puma outlet online
burberry outlet
sunglasses sm
timberland australia
sunglasses
Prada bags
michael kors handbags
Michael Kors Handbags Outlet Sale
puma sneakers online
ugg outlet
kate spade wallet outlet
michael kors australia
Nike Air Jordan Enfants
black friday
louis vuitton outlet online
puma outlet
kate spade australia
Diamond Rings - Official
Green Cleaned
hot dor
pandora deutschland
jimmy choo heels
hermes bag
official chrome hearts
nike outlet
prada outlet woodbury
Air Jordan Homme
Jordan Flight 45 Femme
ray ban outlet
burberry sale
kate spade handbags
spendless shoes
michael kors black friday
coach outlet
michael kors australia official
michael kors australia
nflshop com
jimmy choo shoes
michael kors uk online
Watches
pandora uk
pandora outlet
kate spade outlet online
michael kors watches
kate spade outlet
coach outlet us
michael kors outlet online
Dreamland Jewelry - Official
chrome store
Louis Vuitton Outlet
Air Jordan Enfant
pandora earrings
louboutin shoes
Nike Dunk SB Low
louis vuitton outlet
michael kors
louis vuitton us
michael kors uk
yeezy boost 350
Abercrombie Fitch
kate spade outlet sale
michael kors us
kate spade shopping
kate spade
burberry
coach handbags sale
Air Jordan Retro 3
backlink
discount oakley sunglasses
Air Jordan Femme
ralph lauren polo
Wholesale Outlet Sale
Add Your Link Free
kate spade outlet online
prada outlet online
pandora australia
fake sunglasses
mode damenschuhe
birkenstock
coach outlet online
puma outlet
kate spade outlet
puma shoes
michael kors shoes
Air Max 90 Femme
under armour outlet
Nike Air Jordan Enfants
oakley sunglasses
puma australia
jimmy choo australia
myhermes parcel shop
black friday
Obat Kuat Sex
Coach Bags Outlet
coach outlet online
puma sneakers
oakley outlet
pandora charms sale
coach watches
Nike Free Run
Adidas Outlet
evbid
coach sale
Markenschuhe
pandora necklace
polo outlet
prada outlet
black friday michael kors
jimmy choo outlet
Premier Jewelry. - Official
under armour
Sunglasses outlet sale
michael kors
louis vuitton outlet
Nike Air Jordan Enfants
burberry outlet coupon
birkenstock sandals
Hermes Outlet
moncler us
Jared Jewelry - Official
birkenstock outlet
coachs outlet
michael kors
kate spade
Nike Schuhe
canada goose outlet
kate spade outlet
cheap ray ban
payless shoes
pandora rings
handbags online sale
the beat
michele watch
nike huarache shoes
Family Name Research
puma suede
sunglasses
burberry outlet
?m th?c
Nike Air Jordan Enfants
ray ban shop
kate spade bags
kate spade
casio watches
michael kors outlet
Nike Air Max 2017
ray ban australia
Coach Factory Outlet
louis vuitton outlet online
pandora ring
kate spade outlet store
kate spade
sunglasses store
michael kors factory outlet
kate spade
payless shoes online
Lunette Oakley
Nike Air Max 1
prada outlet online
Nike Air Force 1 Homme
ray ban shop
Prada Outlet
puma oulet sale
coach outlet
ugg uk
sunglasses
chrome store
oakley sunglasses
aqinga17.12.06
 — unknown

tory burch shoes
yeezy shoes
curry shoes
kobe 9
michael kors outlet
lebron soldier 10
westbrook shoes
atlanta falcons jersey
longchamp bags
adidas outlet online
basketball shoes
kevin durant shoes
air jordan 13
yeezy
louboutin shoes uk
cheap oakley sunglasses
http://www.kobebas ketballshoes.us.com
adidas ultra
nike huarache
jordan retro 6
vans shoes
timberland outlet
yeezy boost 350 v2
nfl jerseys
adidas pure boost
adidas nmd
hermes belt
yeezy boost 350
lebron 14
longchamp bags
adidas ultra boost uncaged
nike flyknit racer
adidas stan smith sneakers
kyrie shoes
prada glasses
michael kors outlet online
adidas yeezy
michael kors handbags
tom ford eyewear
yeezy boost
van cleef arpels
calvin klein outlet online
balenciaga
longchamp
nike zoom
retro jordans
yeezy boost 350 v2
kobe shoes
michael kors outlet online
tom ford sunglasses
nike air force
yeezy boost 350 v2
moncler outlet
off white
nike air max 2018
air max 90
new england patriots jersey
off white hoodie
lebron 15
yeezy 700
chrome hearts online
nike zoom
christian louboutin
air jordan
adidas nmd runner
jordan retro
louboutin shoes
nike air force 1
nike foamposite
adidas yeezy
adidas stan smith
air force 1
paul george shoes
yeezy boost 350
yeezy shoes
nike air zoom
longchamp outlet
hogan outlet
off white clothing
kobe basketball shoes
nike air presto
longchamp bags
kyrie shoes
nike polo shirts
nike air max 90
converse outlet
yeezy boost 350
michael kors outlet
russell westbrook shoes
nike air max
asics shoes
yeezy boost 350 v2
Kanye West shoes
kobe 9
pandora charms
yeezy boost 350
adidas nmd
michael kors outlet online
goyard bags
kobe shoes
air max
supreme clothing
adidas tubular
balenciaga triple s
rayban sunglasses
adidas tubular
moncler jackets
nike hyperdunk
chrome hearts online
longchamp handbags
adidas superstars
adidas stan smith shoes
air jordans
adidas eqt
moncler jackets
jordan shoes
basketball shoes
ferragamo belts
adidas online shop
nba jerseys
golden goose
nike roshe one
nike max
pandora jewelry
curry 4 shoes
nike polo
nike football boots
yeezy boost 350 v2
links of london
balenciaga
kobe basketball shoes
true religion
nike flyknit racer
patriots jersey
real jordans for sale cheap
links of london outlet store
red bottoms
kd shoes
adidas yeezy
longchamp handbags
oakley sunglasses
nike air huarache
ferragamo belt
red bottom shoes
michael kors outlet store
adidas superstar
kyrie irving shoes
jordan 13
pure boost
kyrie 4
balenciaga sneakers
nike mercurial
nike zoom running shoe
nike sneakers for women
supreme hoodie
dior glasses
tory burch outlet
100% real jordans for cheap
kobe shoes
lacoste online shop
golden goose outlet
prada sunglasses
nike outlet store online shopping
nike flyknit
kobe sneakers
converse outlet store
adidas stan smith
adidas shoes
adidas eqt
nike air max 90
jordan 4
oakley store
ray ban sunglasses
jordan 11 retro
air max 90
cheap basketball shoes
air presto
asics kayno
nike air huarache
goyard
nike hyperdunk 2017
nike dunk shoes
af1
adidas yeezy boost
nike lebron soldier 10
tory burch shoes
lebron 13
nike basketball shoes
hermes belt
michael jordan shoes
goyard bags
nike running shoes
kobe 11
adidas outlet
moncler jackets
vibram five fingers
true religion outlet
adidas ultra boost
michael kors outlet
adidas ultra boost
goyard handbags
nmd
nike flyknit
golden goose
nike dunks
gucci belt
cheap nba jerseys
nike air max
cheap jordans
roshe run
ultra boost
chrome hearts
jordan retro 12
zx flux
falcons jersey
fitflops
harden shoes
moncler outlet
air max 2018
michael kors handbags
nike free
curry 4
ferragamo belts
birkin bag
retro jordans
goyard handbags
yeezy
nike outlet
moncler jacket
roshe shoes
adidas gazelle
vibram fivefingers
crazy explosive
hermes handbags
russell westbrook shoes
nmd
van cleef
air force 1
mlb jerseys
adidas nmd
off white clothing
birkin bag
yeezy boost 350
nike air max 2017
cheap jordans
longchamp
yeezy boost
longchamp
ray ban
cheap mlb jerseys
longchamp outlet
nike roshe
burberry
links of london sale
nike air zoom
nmd
adidas ultra boost
adidas eqt support
hogan outlet online
jordan 6
nike air huarache
yeezy boost 350 v2
adidas store
yeezy boost 350 v2
cat boots
kate spade handbags
yeezy shoes
links of london
michael kors outlet
nike air force 1
balenciaga shoes
adidas crazy explosive
adidas outlet
nike cortez men
birkin bag
adidas yeezy
iniki
100% real jordans for cheap
bape hoodie
hermes belts for men
yeezy shoes
moncler jackets
lebron james shoes
adidas iniki
michael kors handbags
longchamp bags
damian lillard shoes
converse outlet
pandora charms
paul george shoes
asics gel kayano
stephen curry shoes
vapor max
dior sunglasses
cheap nfl jerseys
nike air max
adidas nmd
golden goose
yeezy boost
lebron soldier 11
michael kors handbags
adidas zx flux
pandora bracelet
yeezy boost 350
balenciaga shoes
nike roshe
chrome hearts
jordan 11
air yeezy
yeezy shoes
true religion jeans
golden goose sneakers
adidas nmd r1
yeezy shoes
fenty puma
tom ford sunglasses
tom ford eyewear
kobe byrant shoes
nike huarache
ray ban
ferragamo belt
lebron shoes
nike free run
vapormax
nike huarache
vans outlet
calvin klein outlet
yeezys
lebron 15
golden goose sneakers
yeezy boost 350
kyrie 3
michael kors factory outlet
yeezys
yeezy boost
derrick rose shoes
reebok shoes
adidas tubular
bape hoodie
nike roshe
yeezy boost
james harden shoes
adidas nmd
gucci belts
air jordan 4
yeezy boost 700
adidas yeezy
yeezy boost
nike cortez
christian louboutin shoes
longchamp longchamps
adidas tubular shadow
timberland boots
kyrie 4
nike air force
oakley sunglasses
cheap jordans
cheap jordans
hermes belt
nhl jerseys
jordan shoes
vans shoes
ysl
converse shoes
nike sneakers
asics running shoes
true religion
yeezy
burberry outlet
nike roshe run
goyard handbags
curry 4
jordan 12
yeezy boost 350
hermes birkin
pandora jewelry
fitflops sale clearance
michael kors outlet
lacoste polo
authentic jordans
caterpillar boots
nike shoes
reebok outlet
adidas superstar shoes
michael kors outlet
nike sneakers for men
lacoste outlet
chrome hearts
nike shoes for men
yeezy boost 350
fitflops
balenciaga shoes
yeezy boost
nike lebron soldier 11
oakley sunglasses
http://www.kobeshoes.uk< br /> adidas tubular shadow
kobe 11
adidas tubular
ysl handbags
jordan shoes
adidas superstar
cheap jordans
michael kors uk
nike huarache
michael kors
john wall shoes
yeezy boost 350
lacoste outlet
longchamp handbags
 — unknown

timberland
jordan 8
mont blanc pens
harden vol 1
louis vuitton outlet
polo ralph lauren
bcbg
ray ban sunglasses
coach outlet online
nike free
fitflops
burberry scarves
true religion jeans
nike roshe
louis vuitton
birkenstock shoes
coach wallets
replica watches
valentino
hermes outlet
hermes bags
nike presto
louboutin
miu miu handbags
michael kors
oakley sunglasses
coach factory outlet
michael kors outlet
oakley sunglasses
nike revolution
running shoes
pandora jewelry
oakley sunglasses
nike dunks
adidas flip flops
jordan shoes
jordan
fitflops
true religion outlet
flip-flops
coach outlet
hockey jerseys
nike epic react flyknit
longchamp outlet
burberry outlet
coach outlet
nike shoes
nike air max plus
red bottom shoes
nike tn
under armour
nike tennis
birkenstock sandals
adidas nmd for sale
stuart weitzman
jordan shoes
basketball shoes
coach factory outlet
nike air
michael kors
nike air max
nike air max
cheap rolex watches
swarovski
hermes
nba jerseys
fila shoes
louis vuitton outlet
ralph lauren outlet
dior handbags
oakley sunglasses cheap
polo ralph
jordan 4
timberland
converse shoes
nike air max 95
replica rolex watches
ray ban
mont blanc
nike trainers
cheap jordans
flops
supreme clothing
hollister outlet
fitflops
michael kors outlet
jordan
louboutin
rolex watches
prada
air max
new balance sandals
puma slides
mlb jerseys
adidas football boots
van cleef & arpels jewelry
ray ban sunglasses
adidas stan smith
hongjunming2018.4.24
 — unknown

Bundesliga six consecutive champions debut in Zhuhai! On April 17-18, 2018,NFL Jerseys all top clubs, leagues, countries and continents including the Bayern Munich China Company, gathered in Zhuhai and participated in the Soccerex Global Football Summit China Conference.NFL Cheap Sports Jerseys The total number of directors of Bayern Munich China Manager Ruben Caspar attended the event and described topics such as Bayern’s China strategy and helping Chinese youth football training.
The theme of Rubin Caspar's interview session was "Professionalism and Sustainability - Bayern's Road to China".Adidas NHL Jersey He recalled that in the 19 months since he came to China, the development of the Chinese football industry has been more imaginable than he had imagined before. Promptly,Adidas NBA Swingman Jersey he was very satisfied with Bayern's business in China. CFL Jersey Bayern is the first European football club to set up a subsidiary in China. Stitched NCAA Hockey Jersey“The club executives are aware of the need to open an office in China. Bayern’s main goal is to have more exchanges with our fans and followers in China.” Wen said,Flex Base Baseball Jersey “In addition, the establishment of Chinese companies is very important to our club’s sponsors. Almost half of Audi’s profits come from China,Soccer Club Jersey and Adidas opens three new stores in China on average. Bayern’s establishment of a company in China is undoubtedly a great deal for their development in the Chinese market. In addition, Lu Wen also talked about the new partners after opening a company in China in an interview with China News Service, AFP and Guangdong TV.Women Jersey In particular, he successively formed partnerships with Tongji University and Tsinghua University. Youth Jersey Bayern hopes to Use your own professional knowledge to help Chinese football develop better.In China, Bayern is undoubtedly a resounding brand. The club has always been committed to establishing closer ties with fans. Today, Bayern not only owns the most active online media, but also organizes a number of offline events. Last summer, Bayern China Basically, every day, Bayern has 10 to 25 events. Such as the Oriental Pearl Tower, Nike  Pas Cher Outlet Bayern players jumped square dance with the fans, which triggered a huge sensation.The visit to the Zhuhai Summit included not only Ruben Caspar and other colleagues of Bayern Munich China. Bernie Berry also carried the Bundesliga salad plate and became a unique landscape during the summit. During the summit, the Bayern booth was in front of the booth. Adidas shoe Visitors to the crowd are endless and people have taken pictures with Bernie and Bayern Bundesliga. Many people also know that Bayern had just won six consecutive championships in the Bundesliga. They also came to watch the Bundesliga champions' festivities, Bayern. The popularity in China is evident.
Bayern's season is over for more than a month and this season has been a success for Bayern.Nik e Air Force One In addition to the Bundesliga's unprecedented six-game succession, the German Cup and the Champions League have also reached the finals and the semifinals respectively. Bayern has also made a successful start in China. “A year and a half since the establishment of the China Office, we already have a professional team of 9 people.Nike Air Huarache We are looking forward to 100% investment in the Chinese market and use professional knowledge to help China, especially Chinese football. Better development.” Lu Wen said finally.
 — unknown

0.366s