you could fix that with a second one-line stanza. — NicMichaels
i dont own this poem but if this implies to be a hoax having a last line ruins it. i understand subtlety hank conveys.
':' — unknown
brevity does not guarantee gravity
St3ntorin — unknown
brevity does not guarantee gravity, but
gravity sometimes requires brevity. — hank
Guys, crit the poem and keep the wit for the forum threads. It's a narrative fragment that hank has posted that needs opening out otherwise it stays as a single line in an anomymous blog. I went to a house. I played guitar. You liked it. C'mon Hank - strut that stuff give us a few meaty riffs and flesh this puppy out! — unknown