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Quickdraw
psychofemale

She's quick
 1
to draw the gun
 2
when he's the target
 3
 
 
bullet after bullet
 4
flies front ward
 5
 
 
shell after shell
 6
flies backwards
 7
 
 
picturing the practice dummy
 8
as him
 9
 
 
and lays it on him
 10
 
 
first bullet,
 11
the heart
 12
 
 
for breaking hers
 13
 
 
second bullet,
 14
the eyes
 15
 
 
the many times his wandered
 16
 
 
the third,
 17
his hands
 18
 
 
that never held hers
 19
 
 
the forth,
 20
his legs
 21
 
 
for walking away
 22
 
 
the fifth,
 23
his back
 24
 
 
where he stabbed her
 25
 
 
the sixth,
 26
his head
 27
 
 
to destroy the memories
 28
 
 
the seventh,
 29
empty
 30
 
 
the way she feels
 31

15 Jan 11

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bravo!!!! i love firing squads!!! but i guess snipers do best. LOL. i love this a lot ;)
 — unknown

thank you :D
 — psychofemale

dig the first bullet, btw ;)
 — unknown

:) thanks
 — psychofemale

i like the title and the storyline/idea
L8 could be "picturing the straw man"
 — mandolyn

unfortunately, she didn't realize the gun was loaded with blanks
 — unknown

thanks
 — psychofemale

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