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the heat after midnight
psychofemale

The hills are on fire
 1
Blazing the skies
 2
Scorching the surface
 3
To hide someone's lies
 4
Three degree burns
 5
Sting like a pinch
 6
Three times a charm
 7
When one can't resist
 8
 
 
The heat after midnight
 9
Breath it within
 10
Hide in the dark
 11
Like a coward who sinned
 12
Inhale, Exhale
 13
Know you're alive
 14
Extinguish yourself
 15
Let go of your pride
 16
 
 
The bitter truth
 17
Disguised by the fables
 18
Can't roll the dice
 19
When fate turns the tables
 20
Show me no pity
 21
Don't give me praise
 22
And I'll rise above
 23
When it all turns to flames
 24

6 Feb 11

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Hi PF - you're into fiery metaphors here but honestly:  "three degree burns sting like a pinch" and "three times a charm when one can't resist"? This is rushed with awful reaching in so many lines to meet the rhyme schemes like L12, L15, L18, L19, L20 etc. The piece says little other  than you came up with the 'cool' title and tacked three ad hoc stanzas onto it with no real thread or message. Sorry but this needs a lot of TLC to work. mitch :-)
 — pdemitchell

Actually, I came up with the title after I wrote it, its a song not a poem
 — psychofemale

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