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Bologna Soup (Soupline Meditation #18)
starr

Ears flap bob in boiling
 1
broth pigtails
 2
twitch salty snorting
 3
snouts come
 4
up for air;
 5
 
 
each
 6
 
 
cube, stewed dismem
 7
berment pork by
 8
products, other
 9
mechanically sep
 10
a rat
 11
ed      parts
 12
 
 
carrots
 13
potatoes hocks
 14
and      hearts.
 15

In loving memory of Beverly Noyes-Prickett.  

15 Mar 11

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OUUU those 2 left feet, were they doing a fox trot?
 — unknown

They were doing a hambone!  :-)
 — starr

well i'm pleased you cleared that up
:)
 — unknown

Hehe.  :-)
 — starr

another great write starr!  love it!  
 — unknown

Y, tanx!  I'm glad u like this.  :-)
 — starr

I also revised the last couple of lines.  The original ending was too silly.  :-)
 — starr

When a cajun cooks a pig ain't nothin' left but the squeak - good sausage fun mitch :-)
 — pdemitchell

Thanks, Mitch!  OINK!!!  :-)
 — starr

starr, dear, you have such a way with words that it is both amazing and heartwarming.  keep up the good work.  :)
 — unknown

Awwww!  Thank you!  Glad you like this!  I am gonna change the subtitle though in a minute, but nothing else.  :-)
 — starr

i would rebreak the entire thing. it is much too neat. it needs to confuse and flow together like a soup. then the thing will be write.

a serving suggestion


Ears flap bob in boiling

water pigtails
twitch snorting
snouts come
up for air; each

cube of bologna is stewed
dismemberment inside a pot
of pork by-products, other
mechanically sep
arat
ed                 & nbsp;   parts
mixed with carrots
potatoes hocks
and          &n bsp;       hearts
 — noodleman

Noodleman!  Thank YOU!  Been a LONG time!  Hope you're well and just wanted 2 stop by and tell u that I appreciate your suggestion!  I LOVE it!  :-)
 — starr

LOVE this!  Its really funny but I know waht you mean about bologney  
 — unknown

*claps*--delightful!  A bologna poem requires some mad skills to pull off.  

7-8, would you consider:
dismemberment in a pot
pork by-products, other

Just the mention of bologna conjures childhood memories, but they got all twisted up with flashes of Jeffery Dahmer headlines so I had to stop--LOL!

Much love
XO
 — sybarite

Aww!  Thanks, syb!  Yup.  Done.  I agree with your suggestions and appreciate 'em.  xobackat'cha!  :-)
 — starr

Yay--better now!  I am off to work--have a fantabulous day.
XO
 — sybarite

Thanks, syb!  And I'm at work having a fantabulous day mySELF!  I love my job and I LOVE the people I work with!  I'm blessed!  Have a good 1!  xo
 — starr

Dismemberment in a pot!  What a tasty line!  I can read it, not sure I could eat it...
 — Isabelle5

LOL!  Oh, Isabelle!  Silly girl!  Thanks 4 the visit!  :=)
 — starr

dammit Starr, this is fantastic!
feels so different, AND
i love it!!
 — jenakajoffer

nice pomme pomme starrlight starrbright no starrs are out tonight* * * *
 — unknown

l10 would be best read "a rat". my idea. what do i know =)
 — unknown

I love you Jen!  Glad u like this!  xoxoxoxoxo from your favorite Northern Shitdawg.  :-)
 — starr

Unk:  Great idea!  Thanks!  There could be worse things floating in one's soup, right?  LOL!  xo
 — starr

Dr. Bologna was the attending OB who delivered my daughter,
she was born april 20 (4/20) at 4:20am  
i shit you not.
 — jenakajoffer

OMG, Jen!  AWESOME!  That is TOO COOL!  xo  :-)
 — starr

loved the play on words here, and how you broke it up... maybe to go along with the dismemberment stanza? I'm not sure, but it was short and packed a ton of punch. not missing a beat you told a great memory.
 — bellahina

Thanks, bellahina!  I'm glad u like this and I give all props to noodleman for the help in breaking it up.  I didn't originally do this on my own.  I just loved his suggestion and went 4 it.  :-)  
 — starr

LOL! love stanza one especially thanks
 — unknown

I'm glad!  Y'never know what's in those bologna sticks, DO YA?!  :-O
 — starr

Surely u MUST have better things to do than spam a poetry site.  Go spam something bigger and better that will actually trace your IP address and prosecute your sorry ass.  
 — starr

Thanks!  More exposure = more reading, funes.  :-)
 — starr

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 — unknown

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