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Mrs.Shufflewick
larrylark

Mrs S. stood up like a raw, rough, one carat diamond,
 1
tough, soured and bodily fluid.
 2
Thorn among flowers, waving a billet doux,
 3
she’d not seem out of place down “Gin Lane.”
 4
Adrift, squiffy, “I speak the truth,”
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she sailed on a whoosy sea of badinage,
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full powered, showering footlights with innuendo,
 7
“I tread on the bored” expelling a lung full of stage door dust,
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wary of fresh air.
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An applauding audience could barely credit her.
 10
“Amontillado? Don’t mind if I do.”
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“A very little sip nips me in the buds, dearie poo.”
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She embodied the abandonment
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of one left at birth on the charity mission step.
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Ebbing, flowing, a perplexing wreck,
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projecting a comedy of errors,
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face screwed like a worn out prune,
 17
smelled vaguely of stagnant pools.
 18
 
 
Then she was gone,
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followed on by an ill choreographed chorus
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of hoofers, silk clad, swirling, clumsy,
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across the star struck stage.
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mocked and falling flat.
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24 Apr 11

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Hi Sir Larry of the passerine alaudidae - a 10 just for the adjacency of adrift and squiffy, ill-choreographed chorus and perplexing wreck (sounds like a firm of lawyers). Face screwed up in L17 reads better. I like well-done whimsy, me.  
 — pdemitchell

thanks pdemitchell your reply is succor to an old diamond geezers heart
 — larrylark

entertaining read.  nice wording and I like the use of 'bodily fluid' in 2.
 — JKWeb

I got into a bit of a sweat over that line JK
 — larrylark

I would never have gone so far as to describe Opal such as you have portrayed her. I always thought that she was quite nice in places, even though she occasionally left a wet patch.
 — unknown

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