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hank

he's got a beard and looks a spitting for rip torn
 1
he says did you go wave your flag in london yesterday?
 2
i say no, and if i hear 'special' relationship again
 3
i'm going to top myself and he laughs
 4
i tell him it's obvious there's a special relationship
 5
'we're your bastardized children'
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he laughs harder and then pauses for thought and breath
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says later that the relationship is now called 'essential'
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i laugh and say that's due to the chinese and then, i say
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next year it will be termed 'desperate'
 10

25 May 11


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as word performance would work, but it's not poetry. there's nothing coming from this but a forcing of you onto my way of reading. do you have anything else to write about but you?
 — syviaplastic

no.
 — hank

then, you should find a short-story forum and learn how to write beyond your present capabilities. just letting this short-stuff go as good enough isn't good enough to the writing. do you have any story to tell?
 — syviaplastic

story, no.
 — hank

Would someone ban this syviaplastic? No one is paying any attention to its comments, and it's all over the place. Plus its commentary is off-the-top-of-head irrelevancies. Maybe syvia is a crackhead? I find nothing of use in its mental masturbation.
 — unknown

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