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Don't Give a Fig for Granny's Biscuits
larrylark

I was always on hand when Rin Tin Tin
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or Lassie needed food,
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spooning it onto Grandad’s hand woven rug,
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sat snug by a blazing fire.
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They leapt out the TV,
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ate with a mean look in each eye,
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sniffed the air, looked me straight in the upholster,
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cocked a leg, pee’d all over my history homework and were off,
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flying down the grey-grained flicker of a dusty trail.
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“Hope its tidy in there? When you've finished
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its time for tea and then take those fig rolls
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on the chair round to Grans for her constipation”
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“Yes mam.” They were passing the cattle station
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as I glanced at the screen,
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one packet of fig rolls locked onto Lassie’s mouth.
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"They’re heading south." Texas, a cowpoke's dream.
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I leapt on my brother's hobby horse;
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“Hi Ho Goldie, up and away.” Faster than the fleas
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in Mucky Mickey's turn-ups.
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I didn’t give a fig, but lived on the breeze
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and the thought of smelling coffee and beans,
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with my underpants smothered in dust,
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sure took the shine off crusty old pea soup,
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steaming in the tureen.
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23 Jun 11

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best title i have read thus today...
nice write
 — mandolyn

newton

fig newton that is
 — unknown

Hi thar `mandolyn I've jus gootan in from a pokin a few cows...of the animal variety of course..an i am agoin ta have a slug a whiskey rye an then lie down with the bartender whose a gonna show me her bus pass from the Alamo to Santa Fe.

Larry all home on the range Lark
 — larrylark

i absolutely love this poem.  i have some suggestions but i am at work so i will return.  just a few minor things jumped at me.

great, great work.  :)
 — jenakajoffer

oh i simply should have known it was my favourite english slug :)

damn you, mr. birdlark.
damn, you get me good with this junk.  ;)
 — jenakajoffer

Pure bacon & beans - a real cowboy's breakfast, Larky.
The thrill of black and white telly came flooding right back.
By the way there's an ornery critter of an apostrophe needs rounding up at L18 - now where did I put that cap gun?
 — unknown

the birdlark always gets the slug JJ.

Larry born to be wild Lark
 — larrylark

Thanks for the spot you 'orny critter that a treble whiskey rye and half a saddle i owe ya

Larry wild west hero Lark
 — larrylark

Afraid I'm on the wagon, Larro - but you could ave a decko at 'Moment' when you find one.
 — unknown

gimme a ruben


Budhaha
 — unknown

Will do unknown
 — larrylark

Hi budha...i do hope your spiritual studies are progressing

Larry Harry Kissya Lark
 — larrylark

hello, i am back to re-read this, still find it wonderful :)

I loved Rin Tin Tin you know, and I love that you say "Grandad", has sentimental meaning to me.

the break in 8-9 is jarring to me.  could 'homework' sneak its way up a line?
could 'away' be 'off'?

grey-grained

cowpoke's/brother's
turn-ups might look better hyphenated?  i read 'turnips' and smiled :)

i realize that pea soup has a ham hock in there, but the 'ham' is not fitting.
i'd just go with 'pea soup' it's tighter.

love ya, birdlark, keep well,

jenny wren
 — jenakajoffer

Thanks Jen will do tomorrow
 — larrylark

Thanks for the spots Jen

Larry Birdlark Lark
 — larrylark

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