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sunny fall day in a small garden
hank

beautifully sunny fall day sees me
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grilling, but perturbing frog
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getting ready her pond for hibernation
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my constant activity peevs her
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she can't keep her head above water
 5
it's her pond, she blinks...but my garden
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rocket in yellow bloom rosette's as if to say
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we knew this weather was coming, so?
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even those that have sprung too late
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the sun allows to give a good go
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mad greedy rushed dexterous birds
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contribute a cacaphony that drowns my own.
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28 Sep 11

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who cares? first line sucked and the thing never got any better.
 — unknown

you're right mbauer. thanks.
 — hank

woody harrelson will get you for this, hank
 — unknown

first line sucks. irish lyric quality? what crap.
 — unknown

why does the first line suck?
 — hank

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