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Drinking With Daddy In The Last Chance Saloon
larrylark

All those years never knew what to do,
 1
while you applied thumb screws
 2
I stayed torniquet'd, in the stew.
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One day I’ll have you helpless at last,
 4
all things float past those who wait.
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Sooner or later, I’ll shake your cold hand,
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measure you top to toe.
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A little less than five foot small,
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shake out moth balls
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from your one and only suit,
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sling you on my shoulder
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while you'll grow ever colder,
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stiffer than a soldier on parade.
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Slip inside “The Local", 
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snap myself a foto,
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sit down in what once was the “snug”
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stoked with hot coal
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but is now
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some bugger all room
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that no one knows
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what in hells name to do with.
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Slam your old tool box on the bar.
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“Two jars of your best,
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for me and my star of a dad." I’d lie,
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then drink both down
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with a tear in each eye,
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smooth down your hair
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not once flinching
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before your glacial stare.
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snug-room in a pub usually extremely small with a coal fire where elderly people met to have a drink.

jar- a pint of beer

2 Nov 11


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wow! the debauchery of "a bugger all room".

i assume this includes bestiality?

sounds like a poetry board i know of.
 — unknown

I know next to nowt which is almost bugger all
 — larrylark

a poetry board you do not name.
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yes, like a town without pity.
 — unknown

and a city without shame
 — unknown

Isn't it a Pitney what a town without Pitney can do
 — larrylark

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