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you were good at helping me end
mandolyn

where have you been?
 1
my knife
 2
is almost a spoon
 3
 
 
i can't make out with you
 4
not like that
 5
(yes, exactly like that)
 6
 
 
you never snored
 7
but i wished you had
 8
that one night
 9
because i had a tape
 10
and you mixed it
 11
 
 
pressed it to my skin
 12
and said
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'play number ten'
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so of course i played eleven
 15
 
 
we were something,
 16
weren't we?
 17
a title for sure
 18
ridiculous and red
 19
 
 
my poem plays dead
 20
on your pillow
 21
i wish you would snore
 22
the night would wake up
 23
 
 
and fuss at me
 24
saying i'm chicken
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but what if you bite?
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and turn me
 27
 
 
to what?
 28
a gremlin was never that cute
 29
 
 
get over here
 30
bring me some clues
 31
not blue ones
 32
let's start with Montana
 33
 
 
forget the capital m
 34
you've shelved us too long
 35
i'm growing a song
 36
that revolves around hunger
 37
and you
 38

29 Feb 12

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mandoli, did you also write something about snoring? lemme find it..i make love while you snore. as much fun : ) )
 — unknown

i don't remember if i wrote one about snoring before...
definitely not 'making love while you snore' -someone else wrote that
 — mandolyn

Your voice is so loud here it hurts my ears :)
 — Known

and i was always such a quiet girl...

:)
 — mandolyn

I like the rhythm in your head
 — unknown

^ thanks. it's mostly dead
 — mandolyn

You have resurrected many words. I came back to your cul-de-sac. =)
 — unknown

haha.
i remember that old fart

now i'm trying to remember YOU
 — mandolyn

Sex enhancer for men: Herbal viagra and adderall A natural sex enhancer for men.  
 — unknown

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