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she told me no more letters please just send an e-mail
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There is no fancy paper now
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to show you how thoughts of you
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made me occasionally
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spill over into the margins.
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No longer the option
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for you to spend all Sunday afternoon
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pondering over the significances
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of an over dotted i, loopless y or
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elongated dash.
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Gone are the times I would sleep
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satisfied you were stung by the venom
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of my biro -
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for you've replaced intimacy with efficiency,
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all soul with
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spam.
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3 Mar 12

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mor?
 — unknown

Clearer.  The title helps, so do the significances, and it is good, too.  But, for the life of me,  just stick the first two lines of the last stanza to the previous stanza (end with "efficiency") and eliminate the last two lines.  

I like this!  The feeling of someone writing on paper opens great doors to subjective reading, and it is far more than it was before, thanks to the changes.  
 — noia

Is there was no other way to word what the last two lines imply as they take the reader back to the start and title?  
 — unknown

Actually, it is no wonder I liked this.  This is one of Leonard Cohen's favorite of mine:  The Letters -

http://www.yo utube.com/watch?v=d-DgwHuqHoY

Enjoy!
 — noia

spam or ham either way no glam
 — unknown

O
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nice update
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Wow
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Ugh
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winsome and cute
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just send her a video of ya thang!
 — unknown

v good detail

y  ---   i
 — unknown

i still love this one
 — mandolyn

Awesoum
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V nice
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Fantab
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font is nice
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