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roman road on easter
hank

to us it seemed undulating
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to the satellite
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eye places it straight
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perfectly straight and in section
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to us it was a wander
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a dart at one time to shelter
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beneath a holly,
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for eat and for re-recognizing
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who knows what they were doing, a road so straight
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bounded by hip high walls
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who cares, we stumbled
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we stuck tiptoed, fascinated; love we tread.
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10 Apr 12

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impressive. nice contrasts, nice sounds and wording. it's all over the place conceptually, but it resolves as believable reaction, if not actually emotion -- too distant, too far away and observing, your servo-motors turning this way and that. but, still...
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Death star by numbers. The crayon set for adults
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ignore the pedophile cadmium / James Bauer
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