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Triple Elvis
larrylark

Did I tell ya
 1
the twin never died
 2
and hid behind was another?
 3
The mother,
 4
being all shook up
 5
handed both over
 6
the county line
 7
for adoption, saying,
 8
'It's now or never'.
 9
 
 
Ramone grew into
 10
a local legend
 11
with syncopated hips
 12
and pouting, smouldering lips
 13
singing like he was
 14
in heaven
 15
but never got the breaks.
 16
 
 
Ricki broke jailhouse
 17
rocks for a while,
 18
then drove a truck
 19
and laid twenty
 20
women a week,
 21
telling them he was
 22
Elvis, hiding out  
 23
from the Colonel
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Meanwhile, back in Memphis
 25
Elvis, the chosen one,
 26
found God
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and became a triple
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king-size, gun-toting fed,
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'Glory, glory hallelujah'
 30
he moaned as he expired.
 31
 
 
His two brothers
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don't know to this day
 33
why they look exactly
 34
like the King
 35
and not being posessed
 36
of suspiscious minds,
 37
they think it's a blessing
 38
from the Lord.
 39
Not even
 40
their adoptive parents
 41
are aware that their kids
 42
are heirs
 43
to the throne.
 44

2 May 04

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cute.

but the title doesn't seem to work...very good work though.
 — imissyou

This is more like a story than a poem!
 — unknown

A narrative poem then!
 — opal

Yes,and with three distinct strands.Must fly got to take my hound dog to be put down as he keeps chewing up my poems-think ne's tring to tell me something.
regards The Dishonourable Larry Lark
 — unknown

larry, just thought I'd catch you as your passing through.  On your profile you show your website as annis arts but there is no such place, how so?

Nice storytelling, by the way, good work.
 — Meep

Sorry, Larry Lark.

BUT where are your poems, recent ones and why is there no such place as your website!  I'm confused!
 — Meep

Dear Meep

All my poems are on here,the ones i intend for discerning readers to peruse that is and now i have time i will get my defunct site up and running
 — larrylark

cool!
 — Meep

Larrylark

Just out of interest, what is on your site?
 — Meep

good  poems man
 — unknown

Dear Unknown

Elvis lives man. Why,he even caused an arguament in my local tonight.

Larry its now or never Lark
 — unknown

Triple Elvis, double cheeseburger and fries to go.
 — unknown

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