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Real Life is Panera Bread
Rynne

They smile in their
 1
crisp white shirts
 2
monochrome ties
 3
because of her
 4
raucous laughter
 5
and drawn-drape smile
 6
the old woman
 7
in the breakfast din
 8
over there he
 9
has his laptop
 10
WI-FI tech savvy
 11
but alone
 12
Chai tea latte
 13
and walnut muffin
 14
life
 15
in this carefully
 16
constructed
 17
artificial Tuscany
 18
The real world
 19
is Panera Bread
 20
and the morning crowd
 21

It didn't occur to me when writing this that not everyone would know what the Panera Bread restaurant was.

8 May 04

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Who is wearing crisp white shirts?  You are right in that you have to keep in mind that not everyone knows Panera Bread.  They at the beginning is too cryptic because you do not take the time later in the poem to hint at or outrightly say who "they" refers to in the crisp shirts.  Waiters or customers? What is she laughing at?  Does she normally laugh every morning, at what types of things?  I'd rework lines 9-17 till they were a coherent and complete thought.
 — unknown

Knowing Panera Bread, I think that this is an accurate description.  "They" refers to the business men on their way to work.  Did you not explain it all so the reader could interpret it to fit in their own mind the people that they run into daily?  I liked this a whole lot.
 — Keesa

I LOVE PANERA

AND CHAI

(but for chai starbucks is my evil corporation of choice).
 — jade

Keesa, not everyone runs into white collars daily.  I think if you are going to be specific enough to say they were wearing white collars, then at least distinguish them between servers and customers, or whomever.
 — unknown

This poem is great!  I love Panera Bread.  Great soup!
 — aforbing

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