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days of shadow and sea
AlchemiA

it's easy to remember
 1
you in these pictures;
 2
light's language of shadow
 3
sculpting time
 4
and
 5
you are there
 6
like a shell pounding out the sea,
 7
laying back on the beach,
 8
head sideways, eyes closed,
 9
knees buckled in the air
 10
open to the Sun's
 11
fingers of light reaching,
 12
glistening there
 13
 
 
I've not been the Sun
 14
in your darkened places
 15
since
 16
the day you offered yourself
 17
to the sky,
 18
the day
 19
I succumbed to the seas
 20
endless waves
 21

13 May 13

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this is wonderful alch!
 — mandolyn

Debussy- Claude: Suite Bergamasque/Menuet
Amsterdam Guitar Trio
 — AlchemiA

the first stanza is so beautifully rendered. the lines are elegant and the subject perfectly simple it is complete.

the second stanza is a star exploding and every moment of that event is also extremely beautiful.

the clarity of each word to image to word is perfect.
 — jenn

Simply lovely, Alch.  :)
 — sybarite

overall, I'm diggin'.   tho' maybe omit "these" from 2?   tops otherwise and the title is prime.
 — JKWeb

troll'in one
 — AlchemiA

they've been leaving their muddy footprints over mine too, alch ..
 — jenn

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