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The Pains of Being Pure in Heart
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I leave the Mission around midnight,
 1
high on Lithium, Lambrusco and loneliness.
 2
I walk the ten blocks past Tillie's Tavern,
 3
past the 24 hour copy center,
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down to the edge of the water.
 5
I stare at shapes suspended in the darkness.
 6
Ships beneath black clouds
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hover over the black sea.
 8
 
 
Spring-breakers living at full volume
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fill me envy and the urge to vomit.
 10
I enter a beach house pulsating with IDM and Vitamin X,
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weave through hungry youth, twisted together
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and writhing to the music like larva.
 13
I don't know anyone here -
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I'm just looking for somewhere to piss.
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The kids are laughing and talking and laughing.
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At nothing. About nothing.
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Behind masks of ecstasy,
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I watch them burn through the best time in their lives,
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and I can see all the way to the edge of
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nowhere.
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And I wish I were a blind and writhing maggot -
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oblivious and pure.
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And on fire again.
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3 Aug 13

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lithium? are you being treated for bipolar?
 — raskolniikov

yes :(
 — 9

Nice life-byte.  Love L2 and the youth-larva analogy.
 — sybarite

i like this a lot. but it's also very sad.
L14 reminds me of the kids who like to sit out on the corner of our street at night- mostly teenage boys who say "bullshit" every 5 seconds to each other
once, i walked our dog past them and almost yelled "bullshit" before they had the chance. but of course i just smiled and let the dog sniff 'em.

how is life, 9?
been to any caves?
 — mandolyn

this is a mean poem, if it was a glasshouse there would be graffiti on the broken remnants of where the air use to be, because the plants have stolen it, and the glass is cutting your face into a grimace like gargoyles on the church edge.

it captures that.
 — DeformedLion

Yes, I suppose there is quite a lot of meanness and contempt,
but a little love and tenderness too.
 — 9

mean
 — unknown

9
 — unknown

but you are not
pure of heart
 — unknown

maybe the kiddies are
 — unknown

Another amazing piece!
 — dannyprice

edits
 — 9

reminds me when the site was active and comments were placed to help rather than hinder
 — unknown

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