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i almost bought doritos but triscuits were on sale
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rivers don't know me (i wish)
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not like the kitchen sink
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the birds in the roof are antsy again–
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when i open the door
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they frantically flap their wings
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going in all directions, so i yell
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"that's not south!"
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and the cat next door slowly walks towards me
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as if she is saying
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"hey there, can you give me attention
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just for the next minute or two, then i won't
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feel like wrapping myself around your legs
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anymore, getting hair all over your ankles
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so your dog can go crazy when she smells
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me on you"
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i still haven't left to get a smog check;
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there are always too many men,
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as if they volunteer to do it
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while their wives are probably making
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chicken pot pie at home, singing
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some upbeat song they have playing on pandora-
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the station set to "taylor swift"
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because they want to feel young again–
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imagine the boys in those lyrics are theirs.
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licking their fingers, enjoying life
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the way they have it.
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i still haven't washed that stain
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out of that one shirt,
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i'm sure it's suppose to stay there.
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to remind me who i am and what i do–
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to remind me that
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i still haven't made peace with your words.
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4 Oct 13

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Strange and odd and good.
I'm not sure of everything your saying exactly,
but then again I'm not that bright.
 — 9

i'm not sure of what i am saying either.
i bet you a pickle sandwich you are brighter than i am.
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I smell a Mandolin.
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you don't smell mandolins, you hear them. you "hear" a mandolin.
the strings aren't tuned today.
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Birds in roof = Mandolyn.
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mandolyn is comatose.
 — mandolyn

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