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rockies
hank

when i lived in the barn
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everything was clean
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a wood ladder led up
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for relief you went out
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there was electric and a big tv
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that shed a blue or black and white glow
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my bed was all white
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down atop and plugged in from below
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in winter we'd snuggle
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neath the wind traveling snow
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had a skychair from haylift suspended
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a long stretch and i'd hang, naked
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good mornings reading, observing the pines
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one day a lady walks out of the woods
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'i'm conducting the census' says she
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so me with my balls, my book and surprise
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(well above head height and in thin mid air)
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state simply as wood- 'there's nobody here'
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19 Nov 13

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bang!
 — hank

I feel this one. Good job man.
 — unknown

Great poem!
 — jenakajoffer

yeah...thanks.
 — hank

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