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the place with no weather
hank

got no news nor information
 1
you'll not have a nice day
 2
or a bad day
 3
 
 
generally, everything will be fine
 4
sounds like sweden
 5
bunch of automatons shuffling about
 6
 
 
if there was a place with no weather
 7
geez, conversation would be cut in half!
 8
the view suffer
 9

12 Feb 14

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i like it
 — stout

yes
 — hank

Ironic, but not chronic.
 — Known

nice poem
 — hank

Do you need line 9?

I think you could say you might not have a good day but not because of the weather and you might have a bad day but won't be able to blame it on the weather.

The first line made me laugh!  I think you quit too soon, you could do so much with this idea but you didn't.
 — Isabelle5

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