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The Onion Fisher
StorkStaples

I threw my hook
 1
over the side
 2
and waited
 3
And then
 4
I caught
 5
an Onion
 6
 
 
I packed it up
 7
took it home
 8
and cut it up
 9
And then
 10
I ate
 11
an Onion
 12

27 May 04

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This brought tears
 — Ayedorite

All I have to say is you need therapy.
 — unknown

who the hell wants to know about your experiences with an onion? FISHING FOR AN ONION????? WHAT ARE YOU SMOKING???
 — unknown

i like onion rings.
 — unknown

OH BABY BABY
HOW WAS I SUPPOSED TO KNOW
THAT PEOPLE WRITE ABOUT ONIONS
ON THIS WEIRD ASS SITE

OH BABY BABY
I REALLY DID NOT KNOW
THAT PEOPLE COULD BE SO MENTAL

show me what drugs you are taking
tell me baby cuz i need to know now
why ONIONS?
 — unknown

nice poem. and i don't believe in drugs. and the onion i'll pretend are a deep metaphor. and thanks for the insight.
 — StorkStaples

You should have thrown it back so others
could have the experience
 — unknown

I totally love this. :)
 — pennylane

This is cute, but I admit I don't get it. So I won't rate it.
-zep
 — zepplin42

Now THAT'S unsanitary! And why the hell do I care? How does that make anybody actually think through their soul, not just sanitation?
 — FangzOfFire

hahaha.. i dont think i get it..  is it about layers... you had a bit of a fish around inside yourself, took it onboard, disected it, accepted it.. had a cry.. hahaha
thats the best i can do. i just love the way it says "an onion" at the end rather than "the onion".. it makes me laugh
 — mightyjoe

Then your breathe stank so bad no-one would go near you for a week. Get out of here.
 — larrylark

nice poem
 — hank

THIS IS THE FUCKING WORST POEM LAMAR HAS EVER READ. WHOEVER WROTE THIS SHIT SHOULD BURN AND DIE WITH ALL OF LAMARS HATRED OF YOU POETRY FAGS. LAMAR HATES GOTHS AND YOU ONION EATING POETS. ONE OF THESE DAYS LAMAR WILL SHOW YOU HOW TO WRITE REAL POETRY AGAIN. BE AFRAID
-LAMAR
 — unknown

thanks i do what i can you know. I appreciate your insight and I hope that your poetry does shock and stun as much as you say it will. take it easy.
 — StorkStaples

This is easily the best poem that has been written on here for quite some time. The deapth of the metaphors is obviously not grasped by the new wave of what was once able to be called an art form has produced. I feel sorry for those of you who do not comprehend this poems beauty for the deapth yet simplicity of this poem is greater than nearly any other that has ben produced for some time. It is not since the days of Arnold that such beautiful deapth, simplicity, and beauty has been realized. I urge you all to reread this poem to understand why I, and I am sure many others who also have some experiance with poetry, believe that this poet has more insight than many of the simpletons who frequent this site have imagined. Please read this poem before you pass negative judgement upon it. LAMAR do not criticize but continue to write your poems. Thank you.
 — unknown

shit. i thought i was writing about an onion.
 — StorkStaples

Its... interesting. Shouldn't the end be 'the onion' instead of 'an onion'? Its a pretty good poem, i guess. Weird.... but... quirky.
 — nickiblitz

one word....awesome. i'm serious, i love this.
 — Mazzo

LAMAR CAN KISS MY ASS
 — unknown

oh.... what am I missing that this is in the weekly top 40 and I don't like it at all...
 — aforbing

Onions eh? They seem to be this season's must have poetic vegetable - so far I've read Valentine by Carol Ann Duffy - I gave my love a Valentine instead of a red satin heart, Onion Soup by Larrylark and now this - what is it with onions - is it the possibilities contained within their multi-layers? or their resemblance to the moon when peeled or their ability to make you cry? by the way this isn't half bad.
 — opal

excellent
 — atmptsuicide

something about this is so perfect. but it's still not good. get it?
 — Charlie

Hi. New here. Just read this one. Love the simplicity of it, and the way it's all clean-cut. But it needs more... uh--depth. I think. I think Charlie's right.
 — unknown

Oh, yeah, and before I forget---Lamar, sod off. Onion-eating poets my foot.
 — unknown

it's all your fault
     it's all your fault
          it's all your fault.

i farted onion.
 — unknown

LAMAR DOES NOT NEED TO "SOD" OFF. LAMAR IS HERE TO KICK SOME POETRY FUCKING IDIOT ASS AND SHOW YOU DUMBASSES THAT YOUR WAISTING YOUR TIME. I WILL RETURN WITH A REAL FUCKING POEM YOU IDIOTS.
 — unknown

'waisting' your time?????- Lamar can't spell and he/she/it can't write poetry either.
 — unknown

I lick this poem. (lick)
 — OKcomputer

sounds fun.
 — unknown

I wish I found myself an onion....
 — PaulBeers

well maybe if put your mind to it you can
 — StorkStaples

really, im glad
meghan
 — unknown

I liked it... but the language could be tightened up, and you could give us a reason why this poem is taking place, exactly. A reader doesn't want to work, they want "Eureka's", told at a slant.
 — unknown

Nice poem.

What sort of bait did you use?
 — jneiberger

mangos mostly
 — StorkStaples

Shrek? Onions are like ogres....
 — unknown

eh?
 — unknown

goog job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 — unknown

you know, for some bizarre reason, i really like this. i can't quite explain it, but, it pleases me. heeeh.
 — Kayleigh

For some bizarre reason, I like sex.
 — OKcomputer

nice. i don't think i've ever read a poem about an onion before. love the title.

7 - i packed [it] up (?
would break stanza after line three (reinforce the action of waiting
lines 4-8 as one stanza?
and then 9-2 as last stanza. cut 'and' from 9

now i'm gonna go brush my teeth
 — catch

STUPID
 — unknown

Eh? I don't get it

Onions aren't really my thing
 — mr_e

Profound. 10.
 — winter

well duh

was it green or white or yellow or purple?

or both

balley birl
 — unknown

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