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Old Together

These days father sits on a portable loo,
to discuss anatomical parts as he stews.
His wife, beside him, further leans to one side.
A thin line of spit trickles.
He has the decency to draw the blinds.
All occurs in one room, downstairs at the front,
as he  watches weeds that make him annoyed,
in a garden that once was his pride and joy.
Who is the invalid? Who looks after who?
These disturbing questions pursued them
throughout married life.
Now they sit side by side in one room.

18 Sep 14

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As beautifully done as it is tragic: it broke my heart. So sorry that you and your parents have to go through such sad times...
 — HisPoem

Thanks HisPoem. Your reply is greatly appreciated.
 — larrylark

so good Lark! and great ending.
 — mandolyn

Larry a beautifully written poem sad indeed
 — cassell

Thanks mand.

Lary OAP Lark
 — larrylark

Thanks for taking the time cassell
 — larrylark

Yeah, I told my kids that once
my body is not me anymore
just load that body up with
hard drugs, lsd etc...
What? will I be worried about
my liver at that point?
THC cookies all day long...
Help me dance my way out of here!
Cool poem bro
 — unknown

Cheers bro. I appreciate you input.
 — larrylark

Oh, wow...the fortelling of coming into the winter of one's life.  Scary, dark, but spotted with the sunshine of complacency, so 2 speak.  It's wise, inevitable and sad all at once.  I like it in all of its complex simplicity, Larry let's have another glass of prune juice lark.  
 — starr

Aww Shucks Starr. You say the nicest things

Larry wiping a tear from the corner of my eye Lark
 — larrylark

Frank and beautiful write. They look after each other in all their inadequacies and disabilities. Old together is far better than old alone. Well written.
 — SilverGirl

Thanks silvergirl.
 — larrylark

Beautifully written!  I can soooo relate this!
 — PaulS

Hi Paul

thanks for the kind words and empathy. I hope all is well with your oldies.

Larry golden aged lark.
 — larrylark

Holy Spam attack, Batman!!  
 — aforbing