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Old Together
larrylark

These days father sits on a portable loo,
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to discuss anatomical parts as he stews.
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His wife, beside him, further leans to one side.
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A thin line of spit trickles.
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He has the decency to draw the blinds.
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All occurs in one room, downstairs at the front,
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as he  watches weeds that make him annoyed,
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in a garden that once was his pride and joy.
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Who is the invalid? Who looks after who?
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These disturbing questions pursued them
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throughout married life.
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Now they sit side by side in one room.
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18 Sep 14

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As beautifully done as it is tragic: it broke my heart. So sorry that you and your parents have to go through such sad times...
 — HisPoem

Thanks HisPoem. Your reply is greatly appreciated.
 — larrylark

so good Lark! and great ending.
 — mandolyn

Larry a beautifully written poem sad indeed
 — cassell

Thanks mand.

Lary OAP Lark
 — larrylark

Thanks for taking the time cassell
 — larrylark

Yeah, I told my kids that once
my body is not me anymore
just load that body up with
hard drugs, lsd etc...
What? will I be worried about
my liver at that point?
THC cookies all day long...
Help me dance my way out of here!
Cool poem bro
 — unknown

Cheers bro. I appreciate you input.
 — larrylark

Oh, wow...the fortelling of coming into the winter of one's life.  Scary, dark, but spotted with the sunshine of complacency, so 2 speak.  It's wise, inevitable and sad all at once.  I like it in all of its complex simplicity, Larry let's have another glass of prune juice lark.  
 — starr

Aww Shucks Starr. You say the nicest things

Larry wiping a tear from the corner of my eye Lark
 — larrylark

Frank and beautiful write. They look after each other in all their inadequacies and disabilities. Old together is far better than old alone. Well written.
 — SilverGirl

Thanks silvergirl.
 — larrylark

Beautifully written!  I can soooo relate this!
 — PaulS

Hi Paul

thanks for the kind words and empathy. I hope all is well with your oldies.

Larry golden aged lark.
 — larrylark

Holy Spam attack, Batman!!  
 — aforbing

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