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the↑ sun»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
burns brighter than you'd guess»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
when all you look is ↑up ↑ »»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
I had to shade my eyes»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
avert my gaze»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
or I would have lost my way»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
because this is really a maaaze»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
a network, a fucking labyrinth»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
through the guts of meaningless existence»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
the intestinal tract, digestive humdrum»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
making figure eights»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
while we all burst in fits of animation»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
nameless bunches branching from cosmological to biological
brimming with the countless coincidences»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
that brought me to this very desert»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
where I have driven stakes into the bedrock»»»»»»»»»»»»
and pulled trees and roots from the ground»»»»»»»»»»»»»
trying to make sense of this prosaic nonsense»»»»»»»»»»»
when a big bang»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
abrupt and sudden»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
of obvious→glaring→evident→explicit→lucid→→→→Y O U
made of superchargedhypermagnets!»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
and I'm dead»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
weight: lead»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»»
((Even though lead is not magnetic it can interact slightly with magnetic fields. By moving a very strong magnet past a piece lead can actually cause the lead to move.))
this is just a microcosm
of a superstructure»»»
««««won't break»»»»»
«you be the architect»
«I'll be the engineer»

2 Nov 14

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I like the content, very much - superchargedhypermagnets is right up my physics alleyway :)

But, I think the additional symbols don't do it much justice.

There's lot of good imagination and amusing energy in this, in the writing .. don't let it be swallowed up in a gravity well of it's own over-indulgence ;)

I like ... I get why it's done the way you've done it .. I want to read and not just look at it.

Try it without all, or most, of the symbols, some work in the last few lines ... and see what happens.

If you don't like, keep it as it is.
 — jenn

thanks jenn!

yeah it was mostly experimental/for fun... gonna leave it the way it is... but i do get and appreciate your meaning.

thanks for reading, thanks for commenting!

I've been having a blast with these symbols since I learned how to make them! here, have an ☂ and a ♥ !
 — dvdsxr

Haha! Having fun is always important. Keep experimenting, dvdsxr! :)
 — jenn

So where are the words here?  All I'm seeing are nothing but a poem full of symbols and no words!!!!  (Just kidding!  LOL!  Wanted 2 scare ya!  Did it work?)  ;-)  Ahmmm...I like the words, the symbols are a bit overdone 4 my tastes, but as long as u like it and are enjoying discovering them, I won't take away your Britney Spears CD's for a week.  You can KEEP them.  I like L11 "digestive humdrum."  That's a fly line!  :-)  This reminds me of frac's kind of writing (fractalcore.)  :-)
 — starr

Maybe they wrote it for somebody. Ever think about that?
 — montners

Well, if you did, its fun reading it. Don't change a thing please.
 — montners

^ montners -- i was just reading your poem and i was about to FAVE it
and now it's gone.
what gives!?

and this here poem, xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx is ooooo so good!
 — mandolyn


I DID write this for someone...

Mandolyn! Thanks for saying it's so good Really!

Starr- Thanks!
 — dvdsxr

and montners.... thanks for reading and commenting.
 — dvdsxr

as an ?¿ intertextual-fugue ?¿ this works -- an experiment of linguistic proportions - it's a rare rant that cantos like this
 — AlchemiA


A comment like that from you is worth more than its own weight in gold.
I mean its text, so it doesnt weigh a lot. But metaphorically, its heavy as fuck. And it means a lot. Thank you.
 — dvdsxr

Isn't that a grand entrance!
 — unknown

I like the sun. It looks pretty.
I also like your potty mouth. It's pretty too.
 — unknown

super thank you anon
 — dvdsxr