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Ladera Ranch
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the sun
 1
shines
 2
every day
 3
never rains
 4
down Skywood Street
 5
 
 
the fences keep
 6
you out
 7
and me in
 8
 
 
unless i go to
 9
buy some pears
 10
 
 
at
 11
Vons
 12

5 May 15

Rated 9.5 (9.8) by 2 users.
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Inactive (4): 7, 10, 10, 10, 10

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gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood
 — unknown

i hear ya
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sounds like a shitty hole
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GAWAR
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NICE
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KO KO
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Sounds like you don't live in Covenant Hills!  Mini-CA Camelot, right?  Cute poem.
 — Isabelle5

tha's right!
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I hope your pear was nice.
 — larrylark

it was!
 — unknown

i'd re-do the final -- it's awkward and makes the good imagining seem cheap, like they're a set-up for a one-liner joke.

i know you're perfect, but still.

the fences keep
you out,
me in --


is enough to make this a poem and make your impression felt. von's is trivial -- ugly and noisy, yes, but not given enough meaning here to cause anything at all except to glance away from it.

didn't jerrell do it well enough in that poem of his where she's in the supermarket and 'passing from Joy to All'...?
 — cadmium

yeh
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awesome
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