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On Water
hank

Like a hibernating bat whose dew droplet, disco ball covering insulates it from the cold vastness of its cave
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so the ocean and atmosphere protect the planet from turning to permafrost
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Consider the atmosphere our amnion; the ocean, the fluid within
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And like the liquid cloak of the sleeping bat, our water condensed here
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23 Aug 16

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sounds like the way 'tyler' talks on 'secureteam10' on youtube. kind of talking faster than his actual vocabulary can keep up with his actual knowledge. comes off as illiterate.
 — cadmium

had to look that up...annoying
my name is tyler
 — hank

ah new it wuz yew, the way the poem looks like an them there UFO's. : )
 — cadmium

—back then.
 — Known

Where's my soup 2015.
 — Known

hank, tyler is a nice name. that's my cousins name as well.
 — PollyReg

pollums, being into language and all, you'd want to actually hear tyler talk on secureteam, to get the point. considering you've had worse things than that in your ear.
 — cadmium

it won't be long and you'll have us reading nexus...

I've never had anything unpleasant in my ear, by the way
 — PollyReg

henry miller? that 'nexus'. it's kind of unreadable.
 — cadmium

that's a trilogy right? I think I read one of them...sexus maybe...a long time ago and you are right, it was a struggle to get through. No, nexus the magazine. Full of conspiracy.
 — PollyReg

nexus is the reason I stopped using canola oil
 — PollyReg

don't know the magazine, but i do know how tyler talks.
 — cadmium

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