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a cunt hair

when i was little and used to build houses
somebody would throw a piece a wood at you
and you'd ask how much?
(that meant 'how much do you want it shortened?')
a cunt hair
it was tricky not knowing precisely what a cunt hair was
it can be many things to the person fitting the wood
anywhere from less than 1/16th of an inch to 1/4
now that i'm older and build for myself
i always know what a cunt hair is, i visualize it
when i have to 'shave a bit off'
i know exactly how much

28 Oct 16

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Lol. You are a poet through and through :)
 — jenakajoffer

GOOD 1!!!!  LOL!  My father, to THIS DAY, STILL says "a cunt hair!"  LOVE it, Hank!  :-)
 — starr

ironic subtext....

 — PollyReg

I'd mostly leave everything how it is...'cept change stanza 2. remove L5 completely....few fiddles with stanza 3

(You and I have had this redundancy talk before, lets not waste our precious..you don't need to repeat the title)

Then I would fiddle with the tense...yada yada, because it is, after all,  where you are writing from.

"it is tricky not knowing what a cunt hair is.
it can be many things to a person (fitting the wood...redundant again)...

etc etc.

On to stanza 3

L10; I always know, I visualise

Happy Hank, I played?
 — PollyReg

Yes, thankyou PollyReg. I am really happy that you took the time to properly read my poem and offer your thoughts. Cheers.
 — unknown

Line four can pop into the cab too. better places for him to be..and all.

A song for you:

Tired of toeing the line....
 — PollyReg

With my edit, I would also want the title changed. Let's call it "fix out"?  

Or how about "The Lilac Man with the Peach Peach Stone" for mystery and shit

 — PollyReg

the fifth comment wasn't mine...in 13 years and i dont know...350 poems? i have never once posted as anonymous
 — hank

 — hank

not that i dont support that group
 — hank

i do...its just that as an Individual...well....but as a GROup!...yeah
 — hank

Naw Hank. It's important that we know that, why????

 — PollyReg

It was me :-)
 — PollyReg