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instructions for the kids
hank

you obey the law
 1
play with ways to stretch it
 2
 
 
you do not talk and not do
 3
lest you become tiresome to others
 4
 
 
you do not not know yourself or wish to live
 5
beyond your own stretched boundaries
 6

3 Dec 16

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Hank just loves to write me poems. Quite the social commentary here! (fear not adults this one is to me.)

https://youtu.be/z8rQ575DWD 8

Naww, just kidding, Hank. I catagorise you as being one of those 'special' few who doesn't much care for 'critique.'  

And sorry, thats harsh, I know, because you probably do but its likely only by a select few (men perhaps? Or one of those man's man women.)

Interesting poem. How old are your kids?

I give you 10. Let's play!
 — PollyReg

play at what?
 — hank

At knitting circle! I was nice to you, please sir may I join your group - *simper, swoon
 — PollyReg

when were you nice to me? just now? or sometime in the past?
 — hank

you won't get into my group that easy
 — hank

even with the knitting
 — hank

Yes, I was nice to you. Just now and in the past. I paid attention to you and left the condescension at the door. To me that's nice. To you? So tell me what's preferable then?
 — PollyReg

I was nice to you. I did not have to comment on your poem at all. That's all there is to it.
 — PollyReg

i know. thanks. i was just being a wiseass
 — hank

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