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trinity 1945
cadmium

what if a nicer atom gave us flowers,
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and tokyo surrendered its heart in gratitude;
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a million japs had flowers to eat,
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and sang flowers back as japanese,
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and
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all
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that
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went,
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and
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all that's gone,
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come back as ghosts
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and leprechauns.
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what if a sweeter bomber dropped gardenias
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on the feathers of the emperor's black duck --
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much happiness,
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great luck to the children:
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born, instead of blind
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and gone.
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and
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all
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that
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went
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would live alive
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today,
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but, younger;
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the atom bomb
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took so much
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yesterdays.
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12 May 17

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https://youtu.be/e5AIisWNvM 4
 — unknown

the nature of my game? older than the devil. original good, except on occasion.
 — cadmium

what great mouth feel. tbh this is really good.
 — DeformedLion

irony meets idealism to drop a bomb in our reflections on the imagery there-in -- what-if critiques we're made with the awe-of-alacrity instead of malevolent soliloquies -- what-if poets we're bones that sprouted flowers -- what-if words had an effect upon reality like some abracadabra simile-smiles that changed the course of dis-course -- loved the play here Cad and the implicit music  
 — AlchemiA

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