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Shiny Brand New Day
larrylark

Eyes blink open,
 1
reel in shadows shackled to far corners.
 2
Been over the border, too deep?
 3
askew among the fondue of your dreams
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Day-light filters onto blinds.
 5
Milk van floats past gold top of early sun
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lining bright horizons.
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Rise entranced,
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Grip the bed post, sway.
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Make your debut,
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stumble into a new day.
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Last night armed with gin
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you were re jigged  
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basking in moonshine.
 14
Reached agreeable balance
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Walking the line between out and in,
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saintliness and sin, binned the bad bits.
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Panic and calm in harmony
 18
 
 
Now point your feet towards the door,
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Loosen your mooring, set sail
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Flail about in stormy seas.
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Later, barely breathing,
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you will be washed ashore.
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crawling into tomorrow evening.
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22 Sep 17

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yeah, your fondue is way too deep.
 — percocet

percocet sends yet another of his "deadly" missiles. Biff bang boom, i'm dead.

Larry livind dead Lark
 — larrylark

My name is Shiny Brand New Day, and I'm a poem. 10-er
 — morningbring

Thanks for bringing these facts to my attention morningbring. I will scrutinize Mr. Poem more carefully next time he pops in here.

Larry binoculared Lark
 — larrylark

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