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Twilight Wind
larrylark

You hope to sit in peace.
 1
Car discreetly parked,
 2
soon be dark.
 3
Imagine the world's asleep
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and what’s not been done
 5
improves with keeping.
 6
 
 
One leaf falls straight,
 7
Lands on windscreen, light weight.
 8
Robin drops on hedge close by.
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Twilight sighs, daytime vacates.
 10
 
 
The spell is broken.
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Wind from nowhere,
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Leaf’s blown down
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Robin, alarmed, ruffled feathers,
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flies away,
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Hedge vibrates with rustling sound.
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Some things just come out of nowhere
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so they say.
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It slackens,
 19
sun’s back on horizon.
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final streak of light
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on a late Autumn day.
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Kids play among shadows
 23
one leaf falls straight,
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lands on windscreen.
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Robin drops onto hedge. .
 26
The worlds stood still.
 27
Darkness falls right here
 28
Just as expected the moon appears.
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18 Jan 18


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I mean l4-6 pretty classic. Bravo. The leaf motif may be heavy-handed? I dunno, play with it. There's certainly a good poem here
 — unknown

Thanks for the advice unknown.
 — larrylark

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