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why tears don't burn
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because tears are like saline
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and I’m out of alcohol
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only acid botched skin
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and perma-grin
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ferments the heavy
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the dry
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the dead
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and it’s a bonfire
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I can't be part of
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16 May 18

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I like this, but I’d prefer “a bonfire I can’t be part of”.
Just seems more natural to me, as a statement.
Nice poem
 — jenakajoffer

aloha jen,

I think you're right and I've modified.

thankx
 — unknown

Hey! Awesome.
 — jenakajoffer

So fkn clean :)
 — jenakajoffer

bonfire of the vanities  i can't  be part of
 — unknown

thanks for reading and comment unknown.
 — unknown

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