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Heaven and the final straw
Rossant

Out of heaven
 1
I glanced upon a pigeon
 2
making a nest
 3
of twigs of brier
 4
All at once I saw the World as infinite
 5
and  post haste repentance
 6
the final straw
 7

20 Sep 18

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I don't think the final two lines make sense when trying to connect them to what comes before them.

I am hard pressed to see this as poetry, the pigeon and the nest barely save it.

There is no way to glean why " the pigeon making a nest" would make one see the "world as pain." I think that's a Buddhist thing, but still see no clear connection.

Are you dead? and if you are how can you be seeing anything? Unless we are witnessing  "rebirth" ie, another Buddhist belief.
 — unknown

Not accepted in Heaven and gone back to earth
 — Rossant

nice complex image. nice wording. this seems to be a picture of implications: the physical can't end and the ideal can't solve.

the hard thing in this is to hear the consonants and vowels as sounding like the image. the sound of the wording is like music in the film of the images.

this is a 'let go' poem, in that it's constructing something with so much heart while withholding full emotion because it's all gone away. irony, anger, fear and the only hope is a mental ideal of 'it's all going to be anyway because it is.'

people aren't going to see this poem unless they've lived it themselves. the unk is stumbling around trying to say something smart -- not trying to see the author or the poem itself, but using the poem as a paper-tract about some religion he's trying to hate. i mean, like a born-again raging against catholics or something, about how they 'got it wrong'. that's bad, but only because it stops the understanding. this poem is about the understanding. the unk should read it until he gets it.
 — cadmium

Thank you  Cadmium for your insights
 — Rossant

That you have thanked Cadmium for spouting total nonsense is funny as hell.
"Insights" hahahaha.

Have you heard the story of "The Emperor's new clothes?" That's what you have just praised.  
 — unknown

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