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My Kingdom
ehalburn

My kingdom for a horse,
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But my life for a name?
 2
Never in my life have I had a name
 3
that wasn't placed upon me.
 4
 
 
Never once did I ask for it to be
 5
Stitched into my shirt tags
 6
And printed on laminated cards.
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To be told it was mine and no one else's
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That I belonged to it and it to me.
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Now I've seen your name
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Written with fire across the sky
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Known it fully and whole,
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Kissed each syllable as
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They wandered from my lips.
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I've said your name with pride
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And ownership
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As if I dared this life to take it from me.
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But if you asked me to take your name,
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as lovers do,
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And wear it as my own
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The trade the letters I've known so well
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And be redefined a new,
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Forever bound to stitch your name into my clothes
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Script it on car titles, leases,
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credit card receipts, and luggage bags
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If lost to be found and then returned to you
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My dear I could not help but to be afraid.
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9 Oct 18

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You could cut the superfluous wording from this, tighten it so to speak. Maybe get rid of the 2 never' that you use.

Something like this:

My kingdom for a horse,
but my life for a name?
Never have I had a name
that wasn't placed upon me;

or asked for it to be stitched
into my shirt tags,
or printed on laminated cards.
To be told it was mine,
that I belonged to it and it to me.

And so on.
 
 
 
 
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