poetry critical

online poetry workshop



Tinder ( for poets )
unknown

Forgive me
 1
I do not have bulging biceps
 2
a v shaped torso
 3
a permanent tan
 4
prominent calves
 5
or six pack abs.  
 6
 
 
All I have to offer is
 7
a receding hair line
 8
a pot belly
 9
declining eyesight
 10
a smokers cough
 11
a tortured soul
 12
fading delusions of grandeur
 13
twenty six letters
 14
and a needle of ink
 15
to infect
 16
and paralyze you
 17
like a virus
 18
every time
 19
you inhale
 20
i open my mouth.
 21




love in the time of encephalitis

wash your hands cover your mouth

20 Oct 18

Rated 9.3 (9.3) by 3 users.
Active (3): 8, 10
Inactive (0): 10

(define the words in this poem)

(1 user considers this poem a favorite)



Add A Comment:
Enter the following text to post as unknown: captcha

Comments:

poets are on fire, they don't need tinder.. thats just awful, but it runs well... very smooth
 — impoppy

like, in what fantasy world do our words work on the illiterate? look at poppy's response, how it's not a critique of poetry, just a reduction of your entire consciousness into some slave-mentality trip, where you're supposed to align yourself with 'think the right thoughts or go to hell.'.

what a critical site is about, is getting into wording, seeing how the wording was made and if it's poetry.

if this site were about something the unks and all thought really important, like 'restaurant food', there wouldn't be any, 'this is pretty' comments, when the food was rotten. people know what rotten food is like, but they don't know what fake writing is like. they know what they know.

poetry is really difficult -- the most literate form of language. read, read again, and then think how you'd have written the poem. then, think again and then comment for the author. don't  comment just to make yourself seem smart or arty or whatever.

read some rimbaud to see what pissed-off really looks like.
 — cadmium

my password is insecure, but my love for your poem is not
 — impoppy

wierd
 — unknown

0.372s