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love and suicide
unknown

I found your bones
 1
in a bucket-
 2
fertilizer flesh tempted
 3
fish to stare
 4
with abstract eye
 5
 
 
weeds grew through
 6
your skull nearby,
 7
off-white and eroding
 8
broken neck
 9
 
 
mouth agape,
 10
act of desperation-
 11
agony sobs liquid trepidation
 12
 
 
pendulum
 13
swayed gently
 14
to the fading heartbeat
 15
of adolescence
 16
 
 
and I was lost in vodka,
 17
gathering anguish
 18
in a paper urn
 19

6 Dec 18

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Line 3 to 5 means what?

Some big words here obscure meanings or
too decorative
 — unknown

hi unknown.  thanks for reading.  I wrote this quite a while ago so I don't fully recall my direction with 3-5.  I believe it has something to do with the person who committed suicide being a metaphor for a fish fertilizing the soil where their flesh is buried if I remember correctly.  I try not to be too abstruse :) thanks again.

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 — unknown

dying in the churned butter
 — percocet

bitch
 — percocet

and u won't let me fix your itch
 — percocet

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