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A triple beauty
Roc1Knight

After watching a picture of a nude woman‘s back

I saw a triple beauty, from the bottom to the top.
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First is her hip, tight, thin and round.
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Then goes her hair, flow down across her shoulders,
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that falls suddenly stop at the slender waist.
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What makes the viewer wonder,
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is the last which arouse her life force.
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A white rose's scent explains her sculptural standing,
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the desire has her enchanted.
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And the woman herself,
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to me has the same toxic smell.
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4 Apr 19


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"A white rose's scent explains her sculptural standing",thats really fucking good....

i don't know how to critique other peoples stuff without seeming like a douche..
but if i was to change things- if i had written this,
i would change the last couple of lines to:
"Yet the woman herself,
to me has the same human smell"

but perhaps the meaning might be lost for you, and is maybe a weaker poem.
 — mr_e

mr_e, a same opinion was been advised by a e-friend of mine. So I post the same reply: "I was describing the same condition I faced. Which she was freezed by the rose's magic smell, and I was freezed by this woman too. Like a hero before the Medusa. In order to break the spell, I guessed I had to curse her smell."
 — Roc1Knight

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